You're one to talk maxim. You're nagging him about spelling and you can even spell the word stupidest; it has two t's in it and last I checked the word put starts with the letter p. Personally I didn't notice any spelling errors or paragraphing problems. I suppose if I printed it out and went over it with a fine tooth comb I could find some but yeah. Although a lot of people would normally be weirded out by a story with a shemale in it, I wasn't. That may just be me being bi, and I'm not saying that I would make love with a tranny. The content is interesting, didnt' notice any real errors, I think it has the potential to be a good story if people would stop being so quick to judge just because they don't like something. There is only one thing I could suggest and that was add some more details into it. Like what do the brother and sister look like. Personally, I would like to see you continue this and look forward to reading it if you choose to pursue it.
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