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Old 10-31-2009, 02:18 PM   #11
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Originally Posted by haxial View Post
I do have to point something out ShinyDemon...

You said a while back that you have given no clue as to where the characters live, or even what country.. Yet if you read the first part, Steve is given £50 to get food... which pretty much, or even completely locates it to UK. To avoid isolation to a specific country, you could have said:

... was given a reasonable amount of money for food...

That avoids the characters being isolated to UK..

Other than that, Brilliant story!!
Very well spotted and fair point - of course, it could have also been Egyptian Pounds, Lebanese Pound, Sudanese Pounds, Gibraltian Pounds or Sirian Pounds ;o) ... but you are probably correct.

When I wrote the first couple of chapters, which was a couple of years ago now, writing fiction was new to me. At the time, I had not even thought about a totally generic story, and this only came to me a short time afterwards. Looking back through the story, I had not noticed this before and if I could change it now I would have put something similar to what you had suggested.

Thanks again for your comments which are, as always, appreciated.
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