Thread: Fiction: Plane ride
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Old 05-19-2014, 11:56 PM   #3
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Umm, I think you may have misunderstood. There is no transition in plot, she's on an aeroplane with someone sat next to her (even you admit it, your suggestion as to how it should be changed has exactly the same meaning), I have no idea how this is confusing for you...

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