GREAT story, one of the best i have read on here in a while.
only comment i had was to lay off some of teh clues a bit at teh start, and not have to expalin everythign at the end.
i think you over emphasised the looking in teh puddles etc at the start, when it would have been better as a passing comment.
at the end you didnt need to go through all the places she had been only a couple and let the reader figure out the rest of teh situations.
ash
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