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Originally Posted by AbusiveMaster
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Aside from the dialogue, which seems to have been drawn from the Twilight saga (still, so was 50 shades of grey, you may be onto something) and the sketchy plot, poor description and juvenile writing style.... forgiving all those, try using a spellcheck. While you are at it, kindly take a course in grammar and punctuation.
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Shut up you grammer nazi, they is not writing a bell selling novel... or making money at this....they are giving up thier free time to write a good story..... be grateful..... dont like it dont read it...... great story btw, look forward to more
