I am very interested as well!
I almost never read stories on here because most are badly written and too stereotypical. To be honest the first part almost made me drop it because it sounded like just a run of the mill blackmail story. And then you had your setup ready and the beauty of your story began to shine.
I like how the mom arriving creates this fake tension: there was a very small risk of her actually finding her daughter with her new toy but for them the risk felt real and you demonstrated that superbly.
I look forward to reading more of this story in the future!
Oh, the reason why I did look into this story? My sister is named Sarah and I thought that was neat.
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