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Old 07-05-2017, 06:44 AM   #6
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Another good installment. The story itself doesn't end in a cliffhanger per se but the part in the middle does make one wonder why did the pop-up excite him and what are in his bags? Kind of a mystery and wants the person to keep on reading. Also once again you kind of flesh out the characters and what they're like instead of blatantly stating it which is something I always enjoy and something I learned in writing classes. I'm interested to seewhere this goes still.
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