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Originally Posted by Komodo Jones
Very nicely written. Hardly any gramattical or spelling errors. The only suggestion I may give to this story is don't afraid to give maybe a little more details. Details can be a writer's best friend. Also you may want to slow down the pace just a little bit. It seemed a little rushed in the truth or dare section. As for my decision of what Kristy should do I'm opting for the masturbation washroom dare.
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Thanks for the feedback!
I'll see what I can do about giving more details. I never know how much is too much but I'll keep your suggestion in mind for the continuation of the story. I know it was quite fast paced, but I have a general plot outline and had to get through the intro of the story.
I'm happy I'm giving myself a week between each part, that way, I'll be able to take more time to proofread and maybe get rid of a few errors
(don't worry, I took no offense, I'm happy you brought it up!).