Good start. But maybe the way I read it was different, but it seems like it was written for a high pace. It could be just me. Maybe try to slow the pace and detail it out a bit more and describe the scenes as they happen a bit more. It's not a bad start though. I'm interested to see more.
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Kik: Kisune22
My goal is to give good dares and receive them because that is how I enjoy the game.
I will send reports when I choose to or if I am asked.
If you give me a repeated dare or a "do your own dare,"
I will be very disappointed because I like to be surprised and challenged.
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