[Dublinjohn]

Just to add, the idea has promise, but I too have a couple of issues.

Firstly please accept this as constructive critique.

1) what 16 year old girl would just send the 5 pics, the blackmail should have at least sent what ever (s)he was holding over her, there was no build up, it was "you are my slave" and "ok"

2) Its your first story, take it where you want to go, don't be asking the readers for direction, what will happen is that they will take it a place that you don't want to go (or are not familiar with), also writing and posting like this, on this board especially leads to a lot of long waits or even worse dead stories, get yourself an outline of how you want to the story to go and then write, proof read and rewrite, I'm two years into writing my first story and its changed a lot organically from the original plan, but its still not ready to be read.


Anyway, may you enjoy your writing and your story