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Coyote · 06-11-2009, 09:54 PM

I don't want to be a killjoy but this story isn't especially well written. It is very rushed, and needs to be more descriptive. Try creating paragraphs and increasing your use of punctuation.

06-11-2009, 09:54 PM	#7
Coyote getDare Addict Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: USA Posts: 2,110 Blog Entries: 14	I don't want to be a killjoy but this story isn't especially well written. It is very rushed, and needs to be more descriptive. Try creating paragraphs and increasing your use of punctuation.