One of the best twists and stories in a long time :) Great :D

very good
 

good story, it is well written, and has some very good twists. i think that it would be added to the best stories section.

GREAT story, one of the best i have read on here in a while.

only comment i had was to lay off some of teh clues a bit at teh start, and not have to expalin everythign at the end.

i think you over emphasised the looking in teh puddles etc at the start, when it would have been better as a passing comment.

at the end you didnt need to go through all the places she had been only a couple and let the reader figure out the rest of teh situations.



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Thank you everyone, I'm glad you liked it. You are also right Lucifer, I was a little too heavy with the hints. I tried taking away the hints, but I couldn't quite find the balance for that. As for the flashbacks, I guess they aren't fully necessary, but I think they don't get in the way.

Great story, even though it's a tad unrealistic. Try to base it on something more belivable next time but great job all the same.

Thanks!! Very nice!!