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thisboynamedsue
01-05-2010, 03:26 PM
This is my first story, I've been reading lots of stories for a while now and figured that i guess i could write one. I will accept constructive criticism, but i don't care for flame =]

My parents have gone away on a cruise without me. Wow…ummm rude? They leave me home with my brother for 7 days and 6 nights. Not smart. I’m Jared and my brother is Martin, we are twins. Both of us are 16, but he is older by one minute and forty-seven seconds. Both of us are skinny with short wavy dirty blond hair, we both run track, and we both have piercing green eyes. We have permission from our parents to have friends over, but no girls…it’s like they don’t trust two sixteen year old boys with having girls over…odd. They have left us some money and plenty of food for the week, it should be a blast!

They just walked out the door. I wave from the window until they have backed out of the driveway, then when they have pulled out I yell up to my brother, “ They are gone, call Joe and Connor and tell them to come over with enough clothes and toiletries for a week.” He yells back “Mk, will do. But while I’m doing that set up the Xbox, I wana pwn their asses.” I quickly hook up the xbox to the big flat screen in the living room, wait for about fifteen minutes then the doorbell rings. I answer the door and there is Joe and Connor both with duffel bags ready for some fun without supervision. Joe is short and thin with short DARK black hair, black eyes, and very pale skin. (he can’t tan lol) Connor on the other hand is very tan, very tall (like 5’ 11”) and has sun bleached sandy hair that is curly. I greet both of them and say “Come on in guys, the party is just starting!” They both laugh and run upstairs to put their stuff down. I quickly followed them up.

I am not going to describe the house…furnish it like your dream home? (it is two stories)

“Come on guys, let’s go play some Xbox” I said. But Connor gave Joe ‘The Look’ and Joe started to look uncomfortable. I knew something was amiss and said, “Well spit it out Joe.” “Well…” He started saying, “Me and Connor were talking…a-and we thought it would be cool to play a game of Truth or Dare for the entire week your parents were gone.” All I could manage was a small “Oh.” “Ummm…I'm cool with it I guess, what do you think Martin?” “Sure sure, sounds fine.” He said absentmindedly. “Well then, I guess it’s settled. Lets head down to the living room, we can play in there.” “Wow said Joe, That was easier than I expected.” I gave him a funny look, but quickly realized that I had never played a game of ToD with him, nor had he heard about the ToD games Martin and I play…

We all sit down in a circle in the middle of the floor in the living room. I grab some dice and we all roll to see who goes first. Of course I fail at dice so Connor ends up asking me “Truth or Dare Jared?” “Hmm…Well I guess I will go with truth man.” “Ok.” He responds. “Who was the first girl you kissed?” I quickly replied, “Jessica Bell, everyone knows that!” “Well, I guess it’s my turn to ask now…” “Hmmm, Joe, Truth or Dare?” Joe decides to play it safe, he says, “Truth” I already had one in mind, so I reply “Would you ever let a guy give you a blowjob?” Joe looks thoughtful for a moment, then states “Yes, why not?” I gave Martin ‘The Look’ and said “Cool I think I would too.” Joe looked between Martin and Connor then made his decision, “Martin, Truth or Dare?” Martin, being Martin said “Dare.” “Ok then Martin, I dare you to take off your shirt, shoes, and socks.” Martin, seeing he got off easy said “Sounds good.” And was quickly out of the clothes and left with just his underwear and shorts. Martin asked Connor, “Ok mate, Truth or Dare?” “Well…” Replies Connor, “I think I am going to go with Dare” “Hmmm ok, I dare you to put your hand on Joe’s crotch.” Connor states retardedly “No Homo” as Joe shuts his eyes and says, “Why me?”

Demon Thief
01-06-2010, 08:16 AM
Interesting start. I hope you post more.

will9022
01-06-2010, 04:46 PM
i like this story so far, keep it going!

Shmushie
01-06-2010, 05:00 PM
Yeah it sound pretty good (Y) Hope you continue! :D

thisboynamedsue
01-07-2010, 07:54 PM
Ok, here is the next part, again, no flame.

Part 2

Connor, seeing it is his turn to ask someone, says, “Truth or Dare Martin?” Martin is about to answer when Connor yells “Wow Joe, getting excited are we? Guys I think Joe needs to free the waking giant.” We all laugh, but Martin, being impatient says, “Ok, I pick dare, whatya want me to do?” Connor grins mischievously, “Ok man” he says, “I want you to take off Joe’s shirt, pants, socks, and shoes for him. Then I would like you to put just his shoes back on, and put his socks in his underwear.” Joe looks mystified, but Martin, seizing the moment says “Fine I will do it, but I want you to put your hand in one of the socks that I have to put in his underwear.” Joe looks more and more dumbfounded and starts to make excuses and such as to why they can’t do this to him. But I quickly silenced him, saying “It’s just a game or ToD, it will be fine.” First, Martin gets Joe out of his shirt to reveal a tight stomach that is tanned. Next is off with the shoes and socks, and then, ever so slowly, he starts to unbutton and unzip his pants. Then Martin says “Stand up Joe” Joe looks confused but does as he is told and stands up. His pants fall just a little to reveal a bit of the white rim of his underwear. Martin then continues to remove the pants pulling them down slowly but surely. In just a minute Joe is left standing there in just a pair of briefs with a very obvious formed bulge. But the view lasted just a moment. Martin quickly told Joe “Bend over and touch your toes” once he was in position Martin grabbed the socks and put one in the back of his underwear. But he did it…differently, he put his hand inside the sock then wriggled the front half up into Joe’s butt hole. Joe screamed “What the fuck do you think you are doing man?” “Just doing my dare how I want to do it bro” Martin quickly retorts. Then he told a very uncomfortable Joe to stand back up straight, hands Connor the other sock, who hastily put it on his hand then proceeds to put it down the front of Joe’s briefs and obviously feels around a bit.

xava
01-08-2010, 07:41 AM
love it :) i hope you post often!!

anywho ill be checking back every few seconds to see if u have updated lol xx

will9022
01-08-2010, 07:14 PM
LOVE this story!!! :D

thisboynamedsue
01-08-2010, 07:40 PM
Wow. I'm glad it's been recieved so well. I will post more of it tomorrow sometime, so be on the lookout! (blame parents for the delay) =P

Duck
01-08-2010, 08:59 PM
Good story, keep it up

Demon Thief
01-10-2010, 11:23 PM
Agreed. Hope you post more in the near future.

MasterOmega
01-11-2010, 02:11 AM
Good story so far.

However, here is your constructive criticism:

Try to break up the paragraphs a bit, they are chunky and kinda hard to read. Also put each bit of speech on a new line, as that also makes it easier to read.

Otherwise, good story. Will hang around and see how it unfolds.

thisboynamedsue
01-11-2010, 08:30 PM
Part Three

Ok guys here it is

“Ok, so it’s my turn now.” said, Martin. “Hmmm ok, Truth or Dare Jared?”
I replied “Dare”, not know what was in store for me.
“Ok, I dare you to give me a blowjob for three minutes”
(Well, I don’t know how many of you guys have twin brothers, who look exactly like you, but its odd; especially if you have a cock, a cock that looks exactly like yours, IN YOUR MOUTH! Well, I do have to admit it was odd, but so hot. I was so turned on.) I sat there with my mouth open for a few moments, but quickly got my bearings. We had never gone this far before. We had watched some porn together, wanked each other, but this was very new.
I got down on my knees right in front of Martin and right next to my two best friends. (Joe still looked uncomfortable lol) I have about a 6.5” dick and so does my brother, big surprise! I said, “Well, here goes bro…” I took half of it at first, clumsily bobbing my head up and down, giving my first blowjob. I wouldn’t say I did a very good job, but obviously it was good enough. Martin was moaning so loud, telling me how good this felt, but then he stopped. He tensed for just a moment, and then BAM. It was like I had a hose in my mouth or something. It just exploded and my mouth was filled with salty cum. But that was only a minute thirty into the dare, I still had another minute and a half left. I desperately tried to swallow the cum, and pull out but he held me there with his hand on the back of my head. He made me stay there the whole time, his cock got hard again….and of all things he cummed again. It didn’t seem like it was any less either, he cummed in my mouth for the second time in less than a minute. I was sorta grossed out but he seemed to be thoroughly enjoying himself. After I cleaned him and myself up I said, “Connor, Truth or Dare?” “Dare” Connor replied whilst smirking at me. “I'm gunna wipe that smirk of that pretty little face boy.” I told him. But he just smiled bigger. “So, I dare you to take off all of your clothes, let me tie you up, then let us do whatever we want with you for an hour. You will be our personal slave.” (Well for one thing…atleast he stopped smiling)

MasterOmega
01-11-2010, 10:09 PM
Okay, good to see that you did take on my advice a little bit. You are still fogetting to put some speech on its seperate line. Here is an example to show you what I mean:

seemed to be thoroughly enjoying himself. After I cleaned him and myself up I said, “Connor, Truth or Dare?” “Dare” Connor replied whilst smirking at me. “I'm gunna wipe that smirk of that pretty little face boy.” I told him. But he just smiled bigger. “So, I dare you to take off all of your clothes, let me tie you up, then let us do whatever we want with you for an hour. You will be our personal slave.” (Well for one thing…atleast he stopped smiling)

This is how I mean you should set it out:

seemed to be thoroughly enjoying himself. After I cleaned him and myself up I said,
“Connor, Truth or Dare?”
“Dare” Connor replied whilst smirking at me.
“I'm gunna wipe that smirk of that pretty little face boy” I told him. But he just smiled bigger. “So, I dare you to take off all of your clothes, let me tie you up, then let us do whatever we want with you for an hour. You will be our personal slave.” (Well for one thing…atleast he stopped smiling)

See how it looks better and is easier to read? Try this in your next installment.

Otherwise nice installment. Am awaiting on the next one, hopefully you will take on board my advice.

will9022
01-12-2010, 04:30 PM
This story just became a lot better! Please Continue!

hex killer8
01-12-2010, 08:48 PM
story so far and omg horny i got love it post the rest



hex killer8
xoxo
love u all:D

sailorman3217
01-13-2010, 03:37 PM
Wow this is an awsome story! theres been alot that have been lacking lately which has caused me to loose hope but you brought it right back!

Jason242
01-21-2010, 05:48 PM
lovin the story!keep up the good work! :)

zach139
01-22-2010, 03:13 PM
good story please write more

Jason242
01-24-2010, 11:04 AM
PLZ finish the story..its soooooo good:D

J:D

Hunanic
01-25-2010, 01:36 PM
please keep going

iheartbriefs
11-11-2010, 08:43 PM
Keep it cumming!!!

kinky
11-15-2010, 09:39 AM
Nice story, it's rushed but it's still super cool ;) <3

iheartbriefs
12-01-2010, 08:11 PM
Not a bad story. Not bad at all.

WowwieGoesWoof
12-06-2010, 08:32 PM
It's a dead thread though so I suggest we stop bumping it. :*(

thisboynamedsue
12-07-2010, 05:00 PM
Yeah, sorry, I'm not interested in continuing the story. Sorry for leaving it with only half of it there.

amazingmrboo
12-15-2010, 09:04 AM
thanks for that great story anyway love you!!!