[Fiction] Secret Club

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I will be starting my first story on this site shortly, which will be about 3 friends, all of whom work at the same organisation, and discover a "club" set up by a few other associates.

Please comment, and constructive criticism is appreciated

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I would like to quickly point out that this story will move slowly, and no matter how much you push it, I won't go any faster.

The three main characters in this story are:

Chlo -
Chlo is 21 years old, and the only person in the story who has had no previous sexual experience. She is roughly 5' 6 tall, and has shoulder length brown hair.

Jon -
Jon is 23 years old, and is the oldest of the group. Jon is roughly 6' tall and has very short blond hair.

Jacob -
Jacob is 20 years old, and although the youngest, he acts more mature than both Jon and Chlo. Jacob is roughly 5' 8 tall and has shoulder length dreadlocks.


Now, onto the story:

A loud buzzing noise woke Chlo up.
"Whaa?" She asked, before realising that she was alone. She looked around the room for the source of the sound, and the backlight on her phone caught her eye. As she fumbled with the keypad, looking through her messages, she heard a knock on her flat door. She slipped on a silk robe and her pink fluffy slippers and made her way through the chaotic mess that was her home, to the door. She looked out into the lobby and saw her boyfriend Jacob, standing there with a bunch of flowers.
"Today is the day you get the good news" he said, crossing the threshold.

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Today was the hardest day of Jon's life. He had worked at Inviz for a few years now, and had been put incharge of recruitment. A few weeks after posting a job advert, an unlikely face turned up for an interview. It was Chlo, Jon's life long neighbour and friend. Now Jon and Chlo had no disputes, but Jon outrightly stated at the interview that she would get no special treatment just because they know one another. Now, decision day had come. It was between Chlo, with her advanced IT skills, and free spirted personality, or Jacki, the rich snobby girl with a "I am wealthier so am more important" attitude. His mind was made up.

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"Hello" Chlo answered her phone anxiously
"Chlo, it's Jon here, I have some news"
Chlo put her phone on loudspeaker
"Ok, I'm ready for this"
"There is some bad news.." Jon said, as Chlo's breathing slowed and her heart rate spiked
"Go on"
"You are going to have to move"
"Move" Chlo enquired, "Move where"
"Well" Jon said, with a change in his tone of voice, "To the apartments at Inviz International. You got the job!"

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Jon felt that went rather well. Chlo would be starting work in a few weeks, and he would finally be able to see Jacob again.

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That is all for part 1, please tell me what you all think

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Part 2: Nothing to do with truth or dare will happen in this part, but will soon.

Recap: Jon felt that went rather well. Chlo would be starting work in a few weeks, and he would finally be able to see Jacob again.

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"Jacob!" Chlo yelled through the flat "I got the job"
Jacob ran from the bedroom, to his girlfriend and pulled her into a hug.
"Congrats babe" Jacob said, with a single tear of happiness trailing down his cheek "Shall we start to pack?"
"Ok, I'll go grab a few suitcases" Chlo stammered.

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Jon ran his fingers over the keyboard.
"Dear Jacob" he said, as he typed the email, "I hope you are pleased, and I hope we can see one another soon. I have already hired a van to help move the stuff over. I really am missing you. I have envy, yet at the same time fear of, Chlo. Such a well spoken girl could never go wrong. Well, I have alot of paperwork to do, so will speak later. Love Jon x"
'That ought to do it' Jon thought to himself. As he carried on with the heaps of work infront of him, his mind couldn't help slipping to when he and Jacob were last alone. Such good times.

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"You really want to pack your bikini?" Jacob asked, rummaging through Chlo's bag, "I mean, it's not really gonna be that hot in the middle of a city, and the nearest beach is a 6 hour drive away"
Chlo stared at him and mouthed one word. 'Roleplay'
"Okay, okay. Your choice"
The two of them packed the three suitcases full of clothes, bar a few items for the next week or so. Jacob then heaved the cases to the hall way, and made his way back into the room, where Chlo sat, with a bottle of Champagne and 2 glasses.
"Celebratory drink." She simply said.
As the two sat there, both were thinking of different things. Chlo was thinking about how her new life will go, and how much time she could spend with Jacob. Jacob however was thinking of a confused matter. He kept imagining him and Chlo in bed, but with Jon aswell. No matter how hard he tried, he couldn't shake the image. In the end, he just closed his eyes, drank the last few sips of Champagne, fell back on the bed, and drifted off to sleep

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Sorry that this isnt as long as part 1, but without completely changing track, i cant make it any longer.
Hint: In Part 3, Jacob and Chlo have already moved to the new accomodation, and it is Chlo's first day at her new job.

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[javer03]

good job, keep it coming

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Part 3 will be uploaded tomorrow.. Thanks to all those who have read it!

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Sorry to say guys, my pc got a virus and Part 3 was lost. I will be back to writing soon.

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Sorry for the long wait..

"Jacob" Chlo called through their new residence. "You gonna make me a cuppa?"
Jacob ran from the bathroom to the kitchen and put the kettle on, as Chlo walked in.
"Sorry babe, I was just shaving" Jacob said, looking at the smartly dressed woman before him. "I hope today goes well".
"Thanks" Chlo said, taking the coffee from Jacob. "I should be back around 4pm"
Jacob walked over to the table and picked up the paper.
"Seems the business in this area is on the rise.. three new factories in as many days."
"Interesting. Anyway, I've gotta go, I want to meet the other new employees." Chlo said, kissing Jacobs neck.
Jacob turned around, saw that Chlo had gone, and ran to the PC. He turned the screen on, and continued typing a half written email.
... she left a while ago, please don't tell her, I will do anything.. and I mean that..
J x
He hit Send, and turned the machine off, grabbed his phone and headed into town.

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Jon picked up his briefcase and headed out of the conference room. Another takeover that was a success.
"Sir, you have a letter, from the Administration Team at Wixel Station" a messenger told him, handing him the bulky package.
"Well, off you go then"
Jon opened the letter, and inside was a bunch of photos of him and Jacob at a party not so long ago, getting rather close for "good mates", even a few showing them having intercourse.
He hurried to his computer, and rapidly typed an email.
Jacob, if you think this is a joke, it's not funny. Who took those photos? Tell me, please.
Jon
He thought for a moment, and hit send. As he threw the envelope at the bin, a note fell out.
Meet at the repro room, at around 12pm. Or else
Jon read the note a few times, trying to deduce who wrote it.

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That's all for part 3, sorry if it is short..

Feedback is appreciated.. I really want to know what you guys think.
I know some say its about the views, but not always.. if you view something, and it turns out you don't like it, and many feel that way, a thread has alot of views, but little support..

Thanks
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[boys_like_girls]

hurry up and write more!! this is gonna b a good story keep up the good work!!

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Thanks

Parts 4 5 and 6 have been lost, but do not fear

I am writing part 4 now

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Note to all you eager readers

Part 4 introduces a new character

Lauren..

She is about 5' 6, shoulder length black hair, and is 15. She is connected with one of the male characters. She is bisexual.

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I know you said it would be going slow but... it's been four years!