[Fiction] Prison Island

[Luffy90]

Originally Posted by Jah Brother

Best story I've read on here so far that actually got finished, I loved it. Though I think it's a shame you didn't expand on the pre-contest part with the different kinds of work. 10/10 would read again

Thanks. And yes, i know there is a lot i could do better, and i can only keep learning. I originally wanted to do more pre-contest things, but i was afraid i would use up all my ideas so that i would just end up repeating most of them in the contest.
For this story, i had a basic idea in mind how i wanted it to go, but mostly made everything up as i kept writing without having any pre planned plot points.

I'll definatly try and plan everything better whenever i decide on my next one, whether it's a sequel to this or a completely new one.

[Jah Brother]

May I suggest a prequel? About how Kate failed her first contest.

[HCM]

Amazing work on this one. Why is this not on the completed stories section?

[Luffy90]

Originally Posted by HCM

Amazing work on this one. Why is this not on the completed stories section?

Thanks, glad you like it. The reason it's not in the completed sections is that i've not contacted any mods yet about it. I will see if i can get it there eventually.

Originally Posted by Jah Brother

May I suggest a prequel? About how Kate failed her first contest.

That could be a good story, but i want to do something other than the same prison place. At least for now. I'm currently trying to plan out a sequel, but it will probably be a while before i get started with posting it here.


If anyone else have questions or suggestions or something like that, i'd love to hear about it. But i'd prefer to be asked in a PM to avoid bumping this thread now that it's finished.

[hot_viper_2005]

I just read your old story. It is quite good. The Island and Hunger Games all mixed together.

I am a little disappointed that she will forever be without memories. I wanted to see her getting some memories back about Kate. I need her to be able to have a path to get revenge. I want the male/dad in the dream to get fleshed out and punished. I want the Mom to either get her comeuppance and be punished for allowing it to happen or get allowed in on it and help getting revenge. There needs to be a President Snow that is running the evil world of sex trafficking in society. Those buying the services need to pay for their evil. The system needs to fall apart and be exposed.

I like good non-consensual fantasy, but this one seemed like it could have book 2 finding the bad guys and a book 3 women tearing down the system taking over (CFNM and Femdom.) We never hear the male story so the first book could have two story lines of the things the males have to go through and then the two males and two females could work together in book 2 until they find the underground militia that is fighting the system. So may places to go. But I do love Ruby being the Katniss of the story.