Fiction: Mark's Babysitting Adventure - Page 2

Cole · 12-17-2009, 11:19 PM

Yea keep going its good

Demon Thief · 12-17-2009, 11:52 PM

I'll try to write more tomorrow. I have a few ideas I want to try.

truth · 12-18-2009, 12:31 AM

not bad im liking where this is going

Hunterman36 · 12-18-2009, 12:44 AM

This is a good story and has great potential keep up the good writing

Demon Thief · 12-19-2009, 11:57 PM

Sorry, I've been off for a while, but I'm back now!
Anyway...

Part 5

Mark and Alex both froze at the sound of the doorbell. Then they heard Steven shout, "I'll get it!" from the next room.
"Who could that be?" Mark asked.
"I have no idea," Alex answered. "Could be anyone."
After what seemed like an eternity, they heard Steven coming back up the stairs, but this time it didn't sound like he was alone. Worse still, the sound of his footsteps seemed to be getting closer to Alex's room. Mark reached for his pants, but Alex said, "No, stay as you are."
Steven walked in his brother's room and behind him was a boy that was around Alex's height and had medium length blond hair. Both boys stared at Mark, who was still in his boxers.
"Who's this?" asked the new boy.
"This is Mark, our babysitter," Steven answered. "Mark, this is Alex's friend, Zach. He is 12."
"And why is he in his underwear?" Zach asked.
"He lost a bet with me, and now he has to do what I say," Alex answered.
"Interesting..." Zach said, his eyes still on Mark.
"I'm going downstairs to watch TV," said Steven. When no one replied, he left the room and shut the door behind him.
"So your babysitter has to do whatever you say?" Zach asked Alex, who nodded. "Can I get in on this?" Zach then asked.
"Sure, why not," Alex answered.
"Mark, why don't you leave the room while Alex and I work on some rules for you," Zach said.
"Can I put my clothes back on?" Mark asked.
"I guess," Alex replied.
So Mark grabbed his clothes and went out into the hall. After Zach shut the door, he started to get dressed. He could barely hear the boys talking, but didn't dare to eavesdrop. He knew that if he was cought doing something he shouldn't, that photo that Alex had would be circulated. He had to devise a plan to get back on even ground with the two boys, otherwise this was never going to end for him.
About ten minutes later, he heard Alex call, "Oh Mark, can you come back in here please?" Mark entered the room, wondering what was in store for him now.

Funny pie · 12-20-2009, 01:30 PM

AweSome dude keep going!

dan1mal · 12-20-2009, 01:47 PM

Really nice so far, more more!

will9022 · 12-20-2009, 09:44 PM

this story is soo good!!!

myswagga · 12-20-2009, 09:56 PM

continue plzzzzzz!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

maxim · 12-20-2009, 10:20 PM

This story has terrific potentilla if you will neither post more often or post longer posts. Anyways story line really has somewhere to go and at first I though this was going to be like the other babysitting story but it's very dvrent and would like to see this one go somewhere!

Demon Thief · 12-20-2009, 11:57 PM

Thank you all for your comments. Maxim, I'll bear that in mind.

Part 6

As Mark walked in the room, Zack handed him a piece of paper. "Here are your rules," he said.
Mark looked at the paper which read:

Mark's Rules

1. You must obey Alex and Zack at all times.
2. You must ask for permission to do anything outside of our orders.
3. If we have other kids over, you must obey them like you do us.
4. You will wear whatever clothes we pull out for you; if nothing is pulled out, wear your normal clothes.
5. Failure to follow rules will result in punishment.

Mark looked up from his rules at Alex and Zack. "What do you want me to do now?" he asked.
Both boys looked at each other. Then Alex said, "You have to play a little game with us."
"What kind of game?" Mark wanted to know.
"Truth or Dare," Alex answered.
"What are your rules?' Mark asked.
"Basically the same rules as usual," Zack answered, "but we changed one little thing. The first person to refuse to do a dare or not answer a question truthfully loses."
"It'll be us two versus you," Alex continued. "Will you play with us?"
"I will," Mark answered. As if he much say in the matter!
"Oh, before we start, I have a deal for you, Mark, and you have to agree," said Alex.
"What is it?" Mark asked.
"If you win, I'll delete the photo I have of you, and you'll be free. If we win, you have to sleep in Steven's room. wherever he wants. Agreed?"
"Agreed," Mark replied. "Who goes first?"
"You can," Zack answered.
And so the game began.

will9022 · 12-21-2009, 12:03 AM

this is getting really interesting! cant wait for the next part!!

dan1mal · 12-21-2009, 07:55 AM

more more plz! this is really good

ursoweird123 · 12-21-2009, 09:21 AM

Can't wait to see where this story goes. It's one of my favorite stories on Getdare. Very good job. Keep going.

nuditydudity · 12-21-2009, 10:12 PM

Wow. This is really impressive! Bravo for sticking with it, and please write more!

12-17-2009, 11:52 PM	#17
Demon Thief getDare Devil Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: In the US Posts: 1,011	I'll try to write more tomorrow. I have a few ideas I want to try. __________________ "How many seconds in eternity?" And the shepherd's boy says, "this is a mountain of pure diamond. It takes an hour to climb it and an hour to go around it. Every hundred years a little bird comes and sharpens its beak on the diamond mountain. And when the entire mountain is chiseled away then the first second of eternity will have passed." You must think that's a hell of a long time. Personally, I think that's a hell of a bird. 14 years on GetDare!

12-19-2009, 11:57 PM	#20
Demon Thief getDare Devil Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: In the US Posts: 1,011	Sorry, I've been off for a while, but I'm back now! Anyway... Part 5 Mark and Alex both froze at the sound of the doorbell. Then they heard Steven shout, "I'll get it!" from the next room. "Who could that be?" Mark asked. "I have no idea," Alex answered. "Could be anyone." After what seemed like an eternity, they heard Steven coming back up the stairs, but this time it didn't sound like he was alone. Worse still, the sound of his footsteps seemed to be getting closer to Alex's room. Mark reached for his pants, but Alex said, "No, stay as you are." Steven walked in his brother's room and behind him was a boy that was around Alex's height and had medium length blond hair. Both boys stared at Mark, who was still in his boxers. "Who's this?" asked the new boy. "This is Mark, our babysitter," Steven answered. "Mark, this is Alex's friend, Zach. He is 12." "And why is he in his underwear?" Zach asked. "He lost a bet with me, and now he has to do what I say," Alex answered. "Interesting..." Zach said, his eyes still on Mark. "I'm going downstairs to watch TV," said Steven. When no one replied, he left the room and shut the door behind him. "So your babysitter has to do whatever you say?" Zach asked Alex, who nodded. "Can I get in on this?" Zach then asked. "Sure, why not," Alex answered. "Mark, why don't you leave the room while Alex and I work on some rules for you," Zach said. "Can I put my clothes back on?" Mark asked. "I guess," Alex replied. So Mark grabbed his clothes and went out into the hall. After Zach shut the door, he started to get dressed. He could barely hear the boys talking, but didn't dare to eavesdrop. He knew that if he was cought doing something he shouldn't, that photo that Alex had would be circulated. He had to devise a plan to get back on even ground with the two boys, otherwise this was never going to end for him. About ten minutes later, he heard Alex call, "Oh Mark, can you come back in here please?" Mark entered the room, wondering what was in store for him now. __________________ "How many seconds in eternity?" And the shepherd's boy says, "this is a mountain of pure diamond. It takes an hour to climb it and an hour to go around it. Every hundred years a little bird comes and sharpens its beak on the diamond mountain. And when the entire mountain is chiseled away then the first second of eternity will have passed." You must think that's a hell of a long time. Personally, I think that's a hell of a bird. 14 years on GetDare!

12-20-2009, 09:56 PM	#24
myswagga Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: usa Posts: 92	great continue plzzzzzz!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 __________________ Male USA

12-20-2009, 10:20 PM	#25
maxim Account Banned Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: UNITED STATES Posts: 1,121 Blog Entries: 33	This story has terrific potentilla if you will neither post more often or post longer posts. Anyways story line really has somewhere to go and at first I though this was going to be like the other babysitting story but it's very dvrent and would like to see this one go somewhere! __________________ [SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]

12-20-2009, 11:57 PM	#26
Demon Thief getDare Devil Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: In the US Posts: 1,011	Thank you all for your comments. Maxim, I'll bear that in mind. Part 6 As Mark walked in the room, Zack handed him a piece of paper. "Here are your rules," he said. Mark looked at the paper which read: Mark's Rules 1. You must obey Alex and Zack at all times. 2. You must ask for permission to do anything outside of our orders. 3. If we have other kids over, you must obey them like you do us. 4. You will wear whatever clothes we pull out for you; if nothing is pulled out, wear your normal clothes. 5. Failure to follow rules will result in punishment. Mark looked up from his rules at Alex and Zack. "What do you want me to do now?" he asked. Both boys looked at each other. Then Alex said, "You have to play a little game with us." "What kind of game?" Mark wanted to know. "Truth or Dare," Alex answered. "What are your rules?' Mark asked. "Basically the same rules as usual," Zack answered, "but we changed one little thing. The first person to refuse to do a dare or not answer a question truthfully loses." "It'll be us two versus you," Alex continued. "Will you play with us?" "I will," Mark answered. As if he much say in the matter! "Oh, before we start, I have a deal for you, Mark, and you have to agree," said Alex. "What is it?" Mark asked. "If you win, I'll delete the photo I have of you, and you'll be free. If we win, you have to sleep in Steven's room. wherever he wants. Agreed?" "Agreed," Mark replied. "Who goes first?" "You can," Zack answered. And so the game began. __________________ "How many seconds in eternity?" And the shepherd's boy says, "this is a mountain of pure diamond. It takes an hour to climb it and an hour to go around it. Every hundred years a little bird comes and sharpens its beak on the diamond mountain. And when the entire mountain is chiseled away then the first second of eternity will have passed." You must think that's a hell of a long time. Personally, I think that's a hell of a bird. 14 years on GetDare! Last edited by Demon Thief; 12-20-2009 at 11:57 PM. Reason: Spelling Mistake

12-17-2009, 11:19 PM	#16
Cole Member Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: USA Posts: 31 Blog Entries: 1	Yea keep going its good

12-18-2009, 12:31 AM	#18
truth Member Join Date: Nov 2009 Posts: 76	not bad im liking where this is going

12-18-2009, 12:44 AM	#19
Hunterman36 Distinguished Member Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: the moon Europa Posts: 646 Blog Entries: 2	This is a good story and has great potential keep up the good writing

12-20-2009, 01:30 PM	#21
Funny pie Member Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: US Posts: 96	AweSome dude keep going!

12-20-2009, 01:47 PM	#22
dan1mal Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2009 Posts: 144	Really nice so far, more more!

12-20-2009, 09:44 PM	#23
will9022 Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: New York, USA Posts: 156	this story is soo good!!!

12-21-2009, 12:03 AM	#27
will9022 Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: New York, USA Posts: 156	this is getting really interesting! cant wait for the next part!!

12-21-2009, 07:55 AM	#28
dan1mal Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2009 Posts: 144	more more plz! this is really good

12-21-2009, 09:21 AM	#29
ursoweird123 Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: New York, NY, US Posts: 243	Can't wait to see where this story goes. It's one of my favorite stories on Getdare. Very good job. Keep going.

12-21-2009, 10:12 PM	#30
nuditydudity Distinguished Member Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: USA Posts: 573	Wow. This is really impressive! Bravo for sticking with it, and please write more! __________________ 9 Years on getDare!! Sing like you know the lyrics Dance like no one is watching Live like you were dying Love like you've never been hurt before