Revenge 69 Style, Part II [FICTION]

Musty 21 · 03-12-2007, 07:52 PM

Now we're in the showers. The guy that pushed me down (lets call him john) took my cloths and towel. While in the shower the guys got out some spray D.O and sprayed it all over me. Then they pulled me out of the shower and pinned me down. They one guy pushed my but crack open and john put shaving cream in it. The feeling of this cold stuff was horible running down my but hole. Then john tied my hands to a shower head so i could get off. Let it be known i was still naked and had the shaving cream in my but. They turned the water on the hottest it will go so my hand would begin to burn on the hot metal. Finaly when the second class hit the showers, they all laughed at me and one guy kicked me in the nuts. After every one left a nice person let me down.... a girl, she heard about my situation and let me down, of course she rubed my dick on her in the process. After i was down i relized i had no close anywhere. So now i would need to sneak into shop class to steal those things that cut open locks

When they went outside to unload parts from the truck i went in quickly and saw that they were coming right back in. I hid in the closet. It took them through the rest of the hour to leave. In the closet i found that tool. Then i quickly ran back to the locker room and saw that there was another group of people in the sowers. Now these were the strongest guys and they pinned me down and sprayed his new can of D.O on my balls until it was out. Now he took my tool i had and squeezed my dick, nipples and ass a little bit with it

after he let me go he took the tool with him to return to shop class. Now back to square one, i though that i would try the year he was born for the pad lock... it worked!

now i had some close, the bad thing was, it was his smelly strapless jock, his smelly shorts, smelly socks, and a smelly shirt. There was also the shoes which reeked the worst.

Now with my balls hurting, shaving cream up my but, and my nipples hurting like hell, and went to my class. i walked in as nothing happend and everyone look at me with the smelly close on. I think that everyone knew by now what had happened. So I went to lunch, sat down with my tray and someone tapped me on the back, I turn around and John throughs the contents of my tray into his jockstrap them screams as loud as he can, HES WEARING MY JOCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Everyone started laughing and i turned back around and then another guy dumped his tray in my back. Since i was a strapless jock it just hit my but and it was so wet that the pants were dripping wet because they were soaked with liquid. I said i would get revenge and left school.... for the day

happy? that one was long. If you want me to write part 3 post ur comments here

Whitestar1983 · 03-12-2007, 09:34 PM

i loved part 2 can not wait for Part 3 the revenge.

depp=noob=lol · 03-13-2007, 10:11 AM

nice writing, but try to take more time, because you re making much not-needed spelling mistakes.

Anyway nice writing and keep it up, maybe you could let john demand his clothes back, so this guy has to get to johns house (or something)

Cant wait for part 3

Musty 21 · 03-13-2007, 06:05 PM

let it be know that I CAN NOT SPELL and i will not write part 3 till there are more responses

Pokerboy · 03-13-2007, 06:48 PM

Very nice Entertaining! No one can spell these days lol. So dont get fussed over nothing....

spat · 03-14-2007, 06:05 AM

The story is the important thing, not the spelling. Keep going.

depp=noob=lol · 03-14-2007, 07:15 AM

why is every story writer demanding replys before he/she writes another part, if you ask me it is a bit arrogance because most of the people who react dont say more then GOOD and KEEP IT UP. and they only react this way because the story writers demand that.

TrekBoy008 · 03-14-2007, 01:39 PM

It's a very good story so far. If you have spelling problems, I suggest writing the story in Word or another program with spell check, that should catch most of the obvious ones. It's also smarter that way something happens before you hit the "Post" button and the story is erased, you don't have to retype it. Also, you might want to try breaking the story into paragraphs to make it flow easier.

Powerstrip · 03-14-2007, 02:34 PM

You have to keep the story going. I am looking through some of the stories (including this one) to try and compile some Non-fiction stuff, so if I fail it will be your fault

Crazzylver, hello, welcome to the getdare forums, that's not exactly what these forums are about, but you never know. Have you tried the master/slave area to see if you can hook up with people on MSN or something (as slave/master relationship at first)

Musty 21 · 03-14-2007, 04:38 PM

i'll write part three tomarrow, or today if i feel like it

scoop · 03-16-2007, 02:31 PM

O.K. that was a good story. If it was a real story I would drive to your state and beat up those punks. I would pronobly snap there rists(no joke).

Good story man.

Rob · 03-22-2007, 04:17 PM

A very good story, but the grammar does detract from the reading of it. I love the idea, though it is pretty un-realistic (a girl getting a naked boy down from boy's locker-room shower, hot water in a school).

DareByrd · 03-22-2007, 05:11 PM

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Originally Posted by Rob

A very good story, but the grammar does detract from the reading of it. I love the idea, though it is pretty un-realistic (a girl getting a naked boy down from boy's locker-room shower, hot water in a school).

i agree its a good story but very un-reallisic...the water at our school is why people don't take showers at our school, we sick to our Deoderant

03-12-2007, 07:52 PM	#1
Musty 21 getDare Devil Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Virgina Posts: 1,023 Blog Entries: 2	Revenge 69 Style, Part II [FICTION] Now we're in the showers. The guy that pushed me down (lets call him john) took my cloths and towel. While in the shower the guys got out some spray D.O and sprayed it all over me. Then they pulled me out of the shower and pinned me down. They one guy pushed my but crack open and john put shaving cream in it. The feeling of this cold stuff was horible running down my but hole. Then john tied my hands to a shower head so i could get off. Let it be known i was still naked and had the shaving cream in my but. They turned the water on the hottest it will go so my hand would begin to burn on the hot metal. Finaly when the second class hit the showers, they all laughed at me and one guy kicked me in the nuts. After every one left a nice person let me down.... a girl, she heard about my situation and let me down, of course she rubed my dick on her in the process. After i was down i relized i had no close anywhere. So now i would need to sneak into shop class to steal those things that cut open locks When they went outside to unload parts from the truck i went in quickly and saw that they were coming right back in. I hid in the closet. It took them through the rest of the hour to leave. In the closet i found that tool. Then i quickly ran back to the locker room and saw that there was another group of people in the sowers. Now these were the strongest guys and they pinned me down and sprayed his new can of D.O on my balls until it was out. Now he took my tool i had and squeezed my dick, nipples and ass a little bit with it after he let me go he took the tool with him to return to shop class. Now back to square one, i though that i would try the year he was born for the pad lock... it worked! now i had some close, the bad thing was, it was his smelly strapless jock, his smelly shorts, smelly socks, and a smelly shirt. There was also the shoes which reeked the worst. Now with my balls hurting, shaving cream up my but, and my nipples hurting like hell, and went to my class. i walked in as nothing happend and everyone look at me with the smelly close on. I think that everyone knew by now what had happened. So I went to lunch, sat down with my tray and someone tapped me on the back, I turn around and John throughs the contents of my tray into his jockstrap them screams as loud as he can, HES WEARING MY JOCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Everyone started laughing and i turned back around and then another guy dumped his tray in my back. Since i was a strapless jock it just hit my but and it was so wet that the pants were dripping wet because they were soaked with liquid. I said i would get revenge and left school.... for the day happy? that one was long. If you want me to write part 3 post ur comments here __________________ Sunday, Septermber 07, 2008 at 7:55p.m. Musty21 achieved 1,000 posts. Click here to see it!

03-13-2007, 06:05 PM	#4
Musty 21 getDare Devil Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Virgina Posts: 1,023 Blog Entries: 2	let it be know that I CAN NOT SPELL and i will not write part 3 till there are more responses __________________ Sunday, Septermber 07, 2008 at 7:55p.m. Musty21 achieved 1,000 posts. Click here to see it!

03-14-2007, 01:39 PM	#8
TrekBoy008 getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Greater Boston Area Posts: 310	It's a very good story so far. If you have spelling problems, I suggest writing the story in Word or another program with spell check, that should catch most of the obvious ones. It's also smarter that way something happens before you hit the "Post" button and the story is erased, you don't have to retype it. Also, you might want to try breaking the story into paragraphs to make it flow easier. __________________ "Words are, in my not so humble opinion, our most inexhaustible source of magic, capable of both inflicting injury and remedying it." ~ Albus Dumbledore (Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows)

03-14-2007, 02:34 PM	#9
Powerstrip Distinguished Member Join Date: Jan 2007 Posts: 716 Blog Entries: 1	You have to keep the story going. I am looking through some of the stories (including this one) to try and compile some Non-fiction stuff, so if I fail it will be your fault Crazzylver, hello, welcome to the getdare forums, that's not exactly what these forums are about, but you never know. Have you tried the master/slave area to see if you can hook up with people on MSN or something (as slave/master relationship at first) __________________ I am looking for a mistress. Please PM me if interested

03-14-2007, 04:38 PM	#10
Musty 21 getDare Devil Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Virgina Posts: 1,023 Blog Entries: 2	i'll write part three tomarrow, or today if i feel like it __________________ Sunday, Septermber 07, 2008 at 7:55p.m. Musty21 achieved 1,000 posts. Click here to see it!

03-12-2007, 09:34 PM	#2
Whitestar1983 Member Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 48	i loved part 2 can not wait for Part 3 the revenge.

03-13-2007, 10:11 AM	#3
depp=noob=lol Account Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Europe Posts: 594 Blog Entries: 4	nice writing, but try to take more time, because you re making much not-needed spelling mistakes. Anyway nice writing and keep it up, maybe you could let john demand his clothes back, so this guy has to get to johns house (or something) Cant wait for part 3

03-13-2007, 06:48 PM	#5
Pokerboy Account Banned Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 114	Very nice Entertaining! No one can spell these days lol. So dont get fussed over nothing....

03-14-2007, 06:05 AM	#6
spat Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: way south Posts: 174	The story is the important thing, not the spelling. Keep going.

03-14-2007, 07:15 AM	#7
depp=noob=lol Account Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Europe Posts: 594 Blog Entries: 4	why is every story writer demanding replys before he/she writes another part, if you ask me it is a bit arrogance because most of the people who react dont say more then GOOD and KEEP IT UP. and they only react this way because the story writers demand that.

03-16-2007, 02:31 PM	#11
scoop Member Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 81	O.K. that was a good story. If it was a real story I would drive to your state and beat up those punks. I would pronobly snap there rists(no joke). Good story man.

03-22-2007, 04:17 PM	#12
Rob Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Georgia Posts: 230	A very good story, but the grammar does detract from the reading of it. I love the idea, though it is pretty un-realistic (a girl getting a naked boy down from boy's locker-room shower, hot water in a school).