all in all a good story
this is jsut my opinion so don't rage mf if you disagree and if you agree kool
ok i love your story much like i love others, and much like others there is 1 thing that has now almost turned me off it.
for me it's when characters sudenly change from the way they are seen earlier on jeremy in this case. again my opinion but for the better part of the story he is umm how to put it..... he does not like people making sexual "moves" on his sister (for the most part) and often treated people who tried to (if memory serves). but in the last two segments he pulled a complete 180 and told his sister to let them play with her pussy? and after she said no she told her to suck all there cocks? (and if i remember right he said something to logan about that in the 2nd last upload "Jeremy: Cathryn, you better watch your mouth, or I’ll clean it out with soap. Logan, you better not even thing about putting that thing any where in my sister.") just saying so please don't rage me
sorry for the rant but it is late and i had to say it
all in all 7/10 (if not for feeling like i stated before 8.5/10)
P.S the last upload ending was nice tho so maybe 7.25/10
(also sorry for the few spelling mistakes again late and very tierd)
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