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Old 10-31-2009, 08:05 PM   #17
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i love this, fantastically wrote
Lol, fantastically wrote.

Anyways, yeah it's very good. My suggestions: lengthen your posts, work a bit on grammar, and use more sentence variation.

Other than that, it's fantastic.

Go on!
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