the story was alright. the surgeries should have been punishments for not accepting her new life. and one by one her mods transform her into a permanent pony girl. she was completely transformed in one paragraph and there was no background as to how she healed up. the cock blinders are a clever touch, but a tad unrealistic. where does all that cum come from? good content, but I feel you threw all your guns in the table too fast. but you are a good writer and your words are easy to transfer to pictures. be patient and let the story evolve. it was fun to read though. good job
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