I have been reading this story for a little while now and I am quite enjoying it. However at this point in time there is something that I feel I must say. For me, the transition from the first 14 chapters to the last one seemed pretty rough. The scene itself was very well written and enjoyable but it really did not mesh together with what came before. It almost felt like you saw it was time for the obligatory sex scene and wrote this chapter to appease certain readers while sacrificing some of the continuity of the story as a whole. This is not an attack or some kind of slight on you or your writing style but rather some constructive criticism based on my personal opinion. Thank you for writing this story and hearing me out with an open mind.
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42 year old asexual male,USA
Loves: Diapers, Messing, Wetting, Body Writing, Hypno
Likes: cum eating, pet play, crossdressing, humiliation, laxatives, anal, scat
Dislikes: Bathroom control, Edging, Hidden Public, Pain
Limits: friends, family, blood, vomit, public, eating poo
Toys: Diapers, medium metal butt plug, pacifier, fleshlight, open in the back panties, enema bulb, lovense Hush and Diamo, household items, mittens, baby dress, small and medium dildo
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