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Wonder what will happen next?

Suggestion: Use end quotes! It's confusing. Also, each quotation should be a seperate paragraph.

Return of the Suggestion: Make this story go a little slower, please.

Overall it is a good plotline, I guess. But my suspension of disbeleif only goes so far; let's think about it. There's a boy aged sixteen, who volunteers to strip in a public park, in broad daylight for seven random girls at least three years younger than him.

I just can't beleive that. And also, if this was true it kind of would be creepy. Continue on, however. That is just my opinion. I'd like to see where this is going.