[LadyCeleste]

While literary license works for some things, in others it does not. I'm a published author seven times over in both novelist and poetic and honestly, if I submitted something like this to my editors, it would get kicked back with red marks all over it.

Secondly, as a publisher myself, I wouldn't even look at this as a possible bit. The story has some interesting elements, but really needs an overhaul on grammar and spelling. While it may be acceptable for a younger crowd, for an older crowd, they won't take two looks at it due to the lack of substance and character.