I'm sorry, but I can't read this story, when it hasn't be formatted properly.
the proper way is:
"This is a example." said John Smith.
Jane Doe looked surprised "Oh!" She exclaimed, " Look, proper English!"
"Look," John smith says, " I can even write action as well."
And with that statement, John smith leant in and pressed his lips to Jane's.
If you want, I could be your beta reader/mentor?
A beta reader reads through work and fixes problems.
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limitsno scat, messy things vomit illegal, beastiality public, family wedgies
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