I do have to point something out ShinyDemon...
You said a while back that you have given no clue as to where the characters live, or even what country.. Yet if you read the first part, Steve is given £50 to get food... which pretty much, or even completely locates it to UK. To avoid isolation to a specific country, you could have said:
... was given a reasonable amount of money for food...
That avoids the characters being isolated to UK..
Other than that, Brilliant story!!
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