Thread: Fiction: Arranged Marriage in Faye Kingdom
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Old 11-28-2011, 09:57 AM   #3
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Looks good, I like fantasy-type stories Just one thing; seems a little like you're jumping straight in, without much time for the reader to get to know the characters first.
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