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Old 03-01-2012, 05:41 AM   #12
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Like the story, though the way it abruptly starts and stops throws me off a bit. Maybe consider planning the chapters out so that each has an appropriate beginning and ending? That's just a minor quibble though. You've done a great job with establishing your main character.

...not so favourable towards the avatar though >.>
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