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Originally Posted by equilibrium
I'm sorry, but I can't read this story, when it hasn't be formatted properly.
the proper way is:
"This is a example." said John Smith.
Jane Doe looked surprised "Oh!" She exclaimed, " Look, proper English!"
"Look," John smith says, " I can even write action as well."
And with that statement, John smith leant in and pressed his lips to Jane's.
If you want, I could be your beta reader/mentor?
A beta reader reads through work and fixes problems.
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"This is a
n example." said John Smith.
Jane Doe looked surprised
. "Oh!" She exclaimed, " Look, proper English!"
"Look," John
Smith sa
id, " I can even write action as well."
And with that statement, John
Smith leant in and pressed his lips to Jane's.
Everyone has a different style of writing and although this is less conventional and standard, it still works. I'm enjoying this story and am looking forward to more!