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Old 08-14-2016, 10:30 PM   #153
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Wow what a great chapter very intense for little Emily

The start was very Berlin Noir I could almost imagine Slave_E as a modern day Bernie Gunther from Philip Kerr's novels.
Then once past the Green Rusty metal door and it's Lesbo bouncer the pace and narrative change as she discovers the seedy club scene of Berlin's smaller dirty clubs.

Finally little Emily is subjected to yet more perils and your description of the seedy low life people who inhabite the club is excellent. From Noir to seedy to down right dirty we share Emily's misfortune

Great Chapter
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