This is hot. Please go on.
Maybe a bit slower. Maybe with less action, and more description of what the individual characters are thinking or fearing. How they strip, how the other one reacts. Draw it out a bit.
And humiliate... slowly. Make them realize how helpless they are.
Tell us about the characters and what they are ashamed of, how they got into the position in the first place...
Or, if you have it all planned out: just do it the way you like. You probably know best!
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