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Originally Posted by foobar123_549
Maybe a bit slower. Maybe with less action, and more description of what the individual characters are thinking or fearing. How they strip, how the other one reacts. Draw it out a bit.
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Thank you so much for your comments. I really appreciate your feedback. In the future I will try to move slower, to be more descriptive. But I still hope the feelings of the protagonists will be seen in their actions.