Wow this is really good !!! I love how you havent given alot away about the characters but you gave away just enough at the same time
I also love how im already started feeling connected to the narrator (love the use of colour for him thinking  ) and how i already REALLY hate Alice ! BOO HER !
God theres so much i love about this story but maybe a criticism would be layout ? I could read it ok but it could always be improved
YOU SIR have got your first fan 
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One day when the light is glowing
I’ll be in my castle golden
But until the gates are open
I just wanna feel this moment
"Bdsm. That's were u get spanked!"
I love weiners and nuts.
"JMN is the one that most the tweenagers want to see in a kilt"
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