Thread: Fiction: my sister knows
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Old 10-08-2009, 02:07 PM   #4
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This sounds familiar to "brother's torture" and so far you have you Misspelled "don't" and "right" didn't capitalize "I" plus the icons in my opinion are annoying and make it hard to read. Other than that it's ok
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