Sorry to say this, but as usualy i think a start like this is a very bad idea... Maybe your story would be nice, but i dont think anybody here will know who you are talking about if you just introduce 8 characters and give them lots of attributes. Who could remember all of them?
And i also dont want to scroll up everytime i read a name...
It's much better if you just start with one character and the others come in very slowly.
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