This is really great!
Writing a story together sounds like such fun, and the story itself really walks a line between sweet and kinky that is absolutely delightful. ^_^
It's pretty rare that you get to see both the sub and dom's side in something like this, and both of you write so well.
One thing that did confuse me though, because I'm not up to date on all the latest bdsm toys. What's a nose hook? Googling shoes me a contraption, but I don't understand why it makes you drool?
Thanks for sharing this, you two, keep on being awesome! <3