[smilesmishy]

Originally Posted by x.Emma.x

This is very good, but I lose you half way through that last post. It was like, "What the hell?" I completely lost track of where you were going, and what you were trying to say. Try to be a bit less lazy when it comes to grammar, cos this could be very good. Nice story though; just a few too many errors. Good job!

ye hi guys soz bout that its just i do it in a rush cause im writing these at about 11 @night cause thats when i can get on getdare so i am a bit lazy and rushing it so ye ill try and fix it next time