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TrekBoy008 · 07-15-2008, 02:49 PM

I like it, but I agree with AllTiedUp10's comments. Slow down and add more detail. For instance, how old are the characters?

07-15-2008, 02:49 PM	#3
TrekBoy008 getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Greater Boston Area Posts: 310	I like it, but I agree with AllTiedUp10's comments. Slow down and add more detail. For instance, how old are the characters? __________________ "Words are, in my not so humble opinion, our most inexhaustible source of magic, capable of both inflicting injury and remedying it." ~ Albus Dumbledore (Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows)