Hey Shadow
I'm really sorry I haven't started reading this story earlier! :3
I just love it, it contains much stuff that I really love reading, thanks for this awesome story, you made my day
Your writing, depiction, etc. is good and the content just awesome :3 ah idk I hope you keep writing
(quick xD)
The repetition of content seems weird to me tho, prolly better to just put it in one chapter and mix both perspective, or whatever, instead of just repeating the whole from another perspective again.
You got some serious problem with then and than going on xD I don't know but it felt like there was more wrong than right. Should definitely take a look on that.. besides that only some small stuff I don't really find now after reading the whole and that's probably not worth mentioning.
You guys are super sweet
(well I don't know you but you kinda seem like xD definitely gonna go check your profile after this post :3 )
Love