Oh wow dude. This is great! I really like your way of writing it, and its very different from every other erotic story I've ever read. By telling us about Kyle having real problems it just makes the whole story a lot more real.
I like your vague but still informative descriptions, and some of your more dreamy parts, like i.e. the description of how the house was like body "The pipes its veins, its humans its brains.." really set the mood for the chapter.
This story do have a dark undertone, but still definitely get me excited
Keep up the great work !