Thread: Fiction: Blackmailing younger sister
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Old 06-17-2011, 02:26 PM   #9
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Interesting story. But I do have some pointers such as grammar use and the story could use more describtive language. But otherwise, I enjoyed the store a lot and I was rather engaged by it. Looking forward to read the rest.
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