my only advice is slow down a bit. Put more detail into to draw readers in. If you go right for the sex at the begin then people wont follow through with it. Also I would watch your ages, 14 is a bit young if you want to do high school ages I would 16 or 17 where certain places sexual acts are as strict as other places. Overall good story and good start. Im curious to see where you go from here. I promise I meant this in a positive way
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Likes: masterbation, cross dressing, risky, driving dares, nudity, bondage
Limits: small anal, shallowing myself, public, friends
NO - NOs : illegal, family, pain, poop, pee, perment damage, death
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