Thread: Fiction: A 'special' relationship.
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Old 05-17-2010, 02:29 PM   #15
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Originally Posted by sydneyyy93 View Post
...He has been coming in and seeing her for her anger problems and more. She somehow convinced him to adopt her. ...
I know you stated that this will be "fiction" but could you still make it a logical story with imaginary characters. There isn't a orphanage in our known universe which would allow a single 20 year old male to adopt a 11 year old female child!

Beside that fact, in the (3) chapters, there isn't any indication there is anything remotely related to "dares" which these forums are based upon!

Structured as is, your story excels above others posted here because it uses proper grammar and punctuation! It's comfortable to read and, even in its short structure, shows you have a talent in prose.
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