I like what I'm reading so far. The ideas well-chosen, the overall structure well-made. Your horny descriptions of the girls was nicely done ... genuine and yet, in its own way, detailed.
My own preference is that you would take a little more time talking about the stripping, only because that's technically my favorite part. In this story in particular, I was confused what you were even wearing after you came out of the bathroom. After all, you'd lost the bet and you didn't describe getting dressed, so you'd left me thinking you left the bathroom nekkid..
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