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Strangers, Friendship, Romance (MxM)
Hi all :) this is my first story on get dare so please any feedback would be MASSIVELY appreciated :)
this is fiction with a bit of fact thrown in as well i might do profiles for the characters late but to be honest you find out everything about the characters during the story ! well here i go ! hope you like it :D Chapter 1 “James wake up!” my teacher exclaimed, “You’ve had all weekend to rest now you need to focus and pay attention!” Hi my name is James and I’m here to tell you a little about how lucky people are when they fall in love. I was basically an average teenager, 16, lazy, a party-holic, medium length brown hair, blue eyes oh and gay not much has changed since then apart from now I’m 17. In the past I wasn’t as confident as I am now. I didn’t like to shout out about myself but this tale will show the transaction between bashful and dauntless me. Anyway I should get back to the story it all started when I was at school during my registration time ... “James wake up!” my teacher exclaimed, “You’ve had all weekend to rest now you need to focus and pay attention!” “Yeah, sorry sir,” I replied sarcastically. “Hmm, can I have a word with you outside then please I need your help with something,” he said as we left the room “right James I would like you to look after the new boy we have coming today, just show him round and be nice to him. Ah here he is now.” Casually walking down the corridor towards us was this 6 foot slightly toned man with brown eyes and short brown hair. He seemed unnaturally confident for someone who was on their first day at school. As he arrived he said to me calmly and coolly, “Hi, I’m Ryan” |
As a first story, it's sounding really good at the moment. Try to keep good grammar, and try to AVOID falling into the "OMG! SLEEPOVER-TORD-SEX-HAPPY-EVER AFTER" trap. Happy storytellering!
Pymani |
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ooh im getting excited just thinking about it ! i think ill start writing chapter 2 now :D |
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Pymani |
It's a pretty good start. I'm looking forward to reading more of the story!
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Hi all this is quite a long chapter as i kind of want to start getting to the action because i dont want to bore you all with more character development ;) at least not for loads of chapters there will be more :)
Chapter 2 “Hi, I’m Ryan” “Urm hi I’m James,” I replied being more reclusive than ever. I was feeling embarrassed but I didn’t know why! “Right James you can take the rest of this tutor time to show Ryan around the school. Enjoy!”my teacher said as he returned to the classroom – you might’ve guessed that my teacher was a little insane “Wow he’s a little weird isn’t he!” he said with a smile on his face “Yeah you get used to it after a while, just try not to spend to long alone with him” I said to him starting to get more confident. This was weird for me it would normally take me a couple of weeks with people before I get as confident as I was then! He was cute and he had a personality that I liked ! I knew that we would become good friends then but unbeknownst to him I wanted more than that. He started laughing and we started walking away from the classroom. It was about 10 minutes before we both got bored and decided just to sit on the bench and talk. There wasn’t a dull in conversation at all while we were talking, we had instantly become friends and to anybody who didn’t really know us they would think that we friends for years not just met 10 minutes ago! During the conversation many things were running through my mind however. Is he like this with everybody or just me? From how nice he was already did he like me as more than a friend as soon as he met me and so he is flirting with me or was he just trying to make a friend on his first day. Suddenly my head snapped back into reality as I realised he just asked me a question. “wha-“ I said looking dazed. “Ha you're weird, I like you, I just said that I’ve got to go to my friend’s swimming party this weekend and I was wondering if you come and keep me company, well I say friends but I’ve barely said two words to the man. I mean it’s totally cool if you don’t want to but I just thought it would be nice to talk some more,” he said the last sentence as if he was embarrassed about asking me and he wanted to take it back. “Yeah sure I don’t want you to drown of boredom there do I?!” I answered, corny I know. |
Really great start :3. Basic storyline so far, but in a really good way :).
Best of luck to you! Woo for the new MxM author <3, Dylsterr |
Thanks nuditydudity i'll try to write quickly to make sure we get to the good bits asap ;)
And thank you dylan ! i know its a simple story :( i wanted to get more confidence and experience before trying anything massively complicated ! And i will also try to uphold the awesomeness of the MxM stories for you :D Anywho ill try to upload the 3rd part tonight ! |
Hey,
I must say nice story you have so far. I like where it's going. And for a first story ever it's really well written, you must read. Well anyway good luck and be reading Abmp |
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i do read quite alot and ive written some other stories before but i never thought they were that good :D |
I quite like this story :D. It is really good.
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Nice new chapter. I think that this is a great story, and I know it's tempting to get right into the more 'exciting parts' of the story really quickly, but make sure that you do not rush too much. We will like the 'exciting parts' more if we care about the characters more!
Great job so far, keep it up man! |
why thank you fire blade ;)
and nuditydudity i get what you mean im hoping that this next chapter that im writing right now will have develop the characters and wet the lips of a few people but please tell if you think im going too fast after ive posted the next starship :D |
You're a fabulous writer man!
keep up the strong work. |
Omg thanks slugger i never thought all these people would like it !!
Anyways im going to post chapter 3 on now i sent it to dylan to check but he is offline and i cant keep my fans waiting ! omg i have fans ! I decided to keep it slow again but im hoping it should progress as well :D |
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