nice one... it was about time for Marie to re-appear...
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Wow guys, thanks for giving my story over 8,000 views in just two weeks. I'm honored. I'm curious about the demographic I'm reaching with this story. It appears from the comments that I'm reaching mostly submissive/switch straight males, which makes sense given the subject matter. But I would be very interested to know if there is anyone out there who is enjoying this story and does not fit this profile. Obviously I'm very grateful to all my readers who appreciate my work, but I would like to know if this story has any transcendental quality. So females, gays, and dominant straight males make yourselves heard! Critical feedback is welcome; It will make me a better writer in the future. Praise is also welcome; It makes me happy. Back to the story...
Chapter 14 The girls were standing in a line in front of me. Some held their hands behind their backs, others at their sides. Marie didn't notice me at first. I was hidden behind the girls and she was distracted by the lineup of her friends in various states of undress. She started with the obvious question, "Lindsay, why are you naked?" All Lindsay could say was "oh my god" as she flung her hands from behind her back to cover her breasts and vagina. Lindsay hunched forward into an awkward, embarrassed position. Before anyone could offer explanation, Marie noticed my foot tied to the couch, sticking out past the line of girls. "What's behind you?" Marie asked her friends. Without a word, the girls separated betraying my bound and naked body to my sister. I struggled to slip out of my restraints to no avail. Marie looked shocked. "Holy shit," she exclaimed, "seriously, what is going on?" There was a long, awkward period of silence. Then Marie said, "Fuck Pat, when did you grow a dick?" The girls laughed as I was reminded again that I was the baby in the room. My face burned with the embarrassment of being a helpless joke for my sister and her friends. Without warning, Marie walked up to the couch and sat on my chest, knocking the air from my lungs and making it difficult to breathe. She gave my balls a firm slap causing a sharp pain to shoot into my lower abdomen. Lindsay let out a gasp. "Care to explain yourself?" Marie asked me. With Marie's weight still on my chest, I choked out the words, "truth or dare." "Oh, so this is a dare is it?" Marie said as she stood up. Marie left the room, commanding her friends, "don't untie him yet." When she returned she had a permanent marker. "Hold still," Marie instructed me as she uncapped the marker. She held me in place with the weight of her body as she wrote "LOSER" down the length of my torso. The girls started laughing at me again. I was so embarrassed but my dick remained as stiff as ever. Marie took a few steps back as she pulled her phone from her shorts. "Don't, don't!" I pleaded as Marie took pictures of me at my most vulnerable. The girls continued to laugh as I pulled more violently to free myself. "These will come in handy," remarked Marie. |
It just got so good! Why did you have to stop writing there! I hope you write more pretty soon since I love this story so much
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I hope Marie's friends aren't getting off lightly in this situation :p
I mean, she seems to be singling out Pat but then, these are all older girls kinda taking advantage of her little brother right? And this is a last hurrah before she goes to college if I'm not mixing up stories. An eeeexcellent chance to leave everyone in the room with some fond memories. |
I agree with Jaw If it becomes a slave master They all should be to blame
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This is really enjoyable.
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omg keep going love it :p
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Well I'm rather enjoying your story and I'm a dominant male. Thanks for writing! :)
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I disagree, I'd like to see all the girls gang up on him
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Great story so far. keep it up.
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hmhm :D idk but I'd like Pat to get back at his sister :D
anyway, the girls ganging up on pat sounds real hot ^.^ oh and as to straight switch/sub males... nah not only :D there is some mainly gay (well.. kinda bi when it comes to sex only) (switch) male who is really lovin' your story ;) Love and keep this awesome writing up! |
now its getting good!
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Good story
When is the next part coming!
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Getting better and better!
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i hope this story isnt... dead!!!
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