Community influecned story
 

Hello, I was hoping to get peoples opinion on a roleplay thread I've been hosting. This is the first roleplay thing I've ever committed to and I'm growing more and more invested in it by the day.

As well as trying to create an enjoyable experience for the people taking part I am also trying to input a underlying story which slowly unravels depending on the choices made by the players.

Because I don't have a lot of writing experience I would like the opinion of those of you who are more experienced with storytelling to offer me feedback on how to improve.

The link is below and I'm eagerly awaiting any and all feedback

https://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=375348

<3 Kah