Unforgiven
 

Hi people of getDare this is my second story but I think this one has more potential than my first please comment if you read it ill give you the first chapter after my short character list and little introduction :)

Characters
Katie= Quite small, Long Black Hair,19, is pretty.
Oliver= Tall, Jet black hair, 23, small beady eyes, perv.
Harry= Medium size, curly-ish brown hair, Katie's boyfriend
Brad= Tall-ish, floppy brown hair Katie's BFF
Tristan= Medium size, spiked up blonde hair, Brad's boyfriend

I'll update characters when I need to :)

Introduction

His long fingers caressed my face, tracing my features gently, leaning in closer our noses were touching. I breathed in his smell, musky, oak, forests. Closing my eyes I stroked his midnight black hair. Our lips met, I opened my eyes again and realised...

To be continued :)
Carry on reading Unforgiven the first chapter will be out soon :)

Thankyou Darebunny22 <3

Can't wait (:

so far its good ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Unforgiven Chapter 1
 

So we go back to the story thankyou to the people who have commented I hope you like the first chapter:D


His fingers caressed his my face, tracing my features gently, leaning in closer our noses were touching. I breathed in his smell, musky, oak, forests. Closing my eyes I stroked his midnight black hair. Our lips met I opened my eyes again and realised that we shouldn’t be here; I pulled back and flicked my long black hair behind my ear. “What’s up honey” he whispered gently in my ear. “I'm not meant to be here,” “Calm down babe it doesn’t matter” I frowned “it does matter!” I said agitatedly. He grabbed my shoulders and tried to pull me towards him “Get off me!” I shrieked, now hysterical I pulled away tears welling up in my eyes. He held on to my wrist, I whimpered in pain “No leave me alone, I don’t want too, you can’t make me. LEAVE ME ALONE” I screamed, pulling towards the door screaming I slapped him round the face, he let go of my wrist “Argh you Bitch” he exclaimed by which time I was out of the door and running down the road as quick as I could.
As I got to my house I locked the door quickly behind me, panting heavily I slumped to the floor tears spilling out of my eyes. Why did he do that to me? Why did he stalk me where ever I went? What had I done to him?

To be continued
Carry on reading Unforgiven To find out what happens :)

Very nice, can't wait for more :)

Chapter 2
 

Thanks to people who read we are getting a bit more into the story now :)

My night was tortured with nightmares, his slimy black hair entwined within my chained wrists, he was whipping me, trying to kiss me. I woke up then I decided to ring Brad.
“Hey sweetie it’s the middle of the night” my best friend murmured wearily, “I need to talk... Urgently” I said padding down the stairs. I sat on the sofa cross legged in my funky pink PJ’s “What is it Katie?” Brad asked, “Its umm Oliver”, “Katie what have I told you about not going near that perverted freak!” “I know, he said he had some of my clothes I left o-over there” my voice trembling. “Aww honey what did he do?” came Brad’s anxious voice “H-he tried to kiss me and I forgot what I was doing and nearly kissed him back, but please don’t tell Harry, I-I didn’t realise” I said “Babe would I do that?” “No I spose not my gay BFF” “Well done my straight BFF” he laughed, talking to Brad always made me feel better! “So should we have a midnight chat?” I suggested randomly “Sure freak” he joked “Weirdo” I retorted. After many hours of chatting about everything I decided it was time to go back to sleep, “Night Brad” “Night Bwabwy Kwatie” Brad said in a mock baby voice, I scowled... “You’re scowling aren’t you” I giggled “Ohh Brad you know me so well” “Yeah I do, Well laters sweetie” I put the phone down. Ahhh how much a midnight phone call can cheer you up!

TO BE CONTINUED :cool:

Neautral chapter, has me hangingnin to see why happens the following day.

Great Story keep it comming

love it XD xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Chapter 3
 

Finally my next chapter hope you like :)

“Hey Katie” “What is it Tristan?” “Guess!” “Trist I only just got to sleep, don’t make me guess!” I said in a pretend whiney voice. “Well it involves: Me, you, Brad and Harry and anyone else we can get!” “Let me guess... hmm, is it truth or dare... AGAIN” “Hey how did you guess meanie?” “I'm psychic” I murmured in what was meant to be a dreamy voice “Psycho more like” Tristan quickly added “Hey why do you and Brad constantly bully me” “Its just something we do babe!” “Hmm well when is it?” “Friday night, be there!” I looked back on the past TORD games and to be honest I didn’t care if I had to strip because the only three people there were my boyfriend and my two gay buddies. I was looking forward to it. I was leaping to see my boyfriend Harry, just to see his cute half smile made my heart pound in excitement, this excitement was too much so I decided to have a dance in my pyjamas, dancing to anything on my iPod’s playlist, which was sometimes hard when there were slow songs! Our last kiss flew through my mind countless times, his cute curls wrapped around my fingers (the kind of curls he had were like Harry Styles’ who I also had a mega crush on and coincidentally they had the same name!) I loved them both but there was a difference my Harry was all mine <3

To be continued
(for those of you who don't know who Harry Styles is he is a 16(17?) year old guy from the new boy-band One Direction (Formed on British X-Factor)
Thanks for reading pleaseee comment XXXXX

Interesting , want more :p

You are a great wrighter!

Love the story! It's refreshing to see someone setting the scene and developing characters instead of rushing straight to sex scene after sex scene.

And i don't mean to criticise, but i think it would be better layed out if you took a new line for each time someone spoke. As there is a lot of speech, it would make it a much easier read.
I'm just trying to help :D

Can't wait till the next update :)

YEs thankyou I thought I should do that but then I wondered if that was just in scripts or plays hmm how much a holiday can make you forget everything I'll keep that in mind for the next chapter :)