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Insanity 04-30-2008 05:39 PM

Sarah's first time as a slave [FICTION]
 
Sarah was 17 years old, skinny, with brownish hair. She had a petite frame, with a petite chest and butt to match. She wasn't a virgin, but that was only because one night she was fooling around with a dildo her friend from school gave her and accidentally took her own virginity! So she had never had sex before, in any way.

She was at school, it was the last day of the year. Everyone was excited that summer was about to begin. Her parents were about to go on a private cruise to the bahamas (she was angry they weren't taking her, but they wanted private time), and she would have the whole house to herself for a week.

In chemistry class, they were having a lab, all dressed up in their aprons and goggles, they all looked like real characters. Her teacher had paired her up with a kid named Eric. He was one of those people that don't talk much, but are not really nerdy or ugly. Most people didn't know about his sick mind.

As Sarah was pouring some chemical (she didn't even know what it was) into the test tube it suddenly exploded, getting acid all over her! Her teacher rushed her to the emergency shower, only to find that it had penetrated her clothes completely and was now burning her skin! Eric, who had been silently watching her tight butt that poked out of the apron the whole time, and the slight roundness of her chest through the fabric, enjoyed seeing her soaking wet, as it made it stand out even more.

The teacher made the whole class go out into the hall, so Sarah could take her clothes off and wash off all of the burning acid. Unbeknownst to everyone, Eric secretly snuck into the back room (not allowed for students) and watched through the glass on the door as Sarah undressed. He had an epiphany and whipped out his cell phone, taking many pictures of her naked, wet body. From all angles, too.

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When Sarah got on the bus at the end of the day (chemistry was first block, she missed her other classes but decided to ride the bus home), she never could have expected what happened next. Just as the bus pulled out of the school parking lot, Eric sat down beside her. She sat there with a confused look on her face, as she didn't really know him. He just grinned and asked her how she was. "Uh.....good?" was her reply. He immediately placed his hand on her leg. "What the hell!?" screamed Sarah, and he "shhhhd" her placing his fingers on her lips. He pulled out his cell phone, leaning in closer to her and flipped it open to his background, which was a stunning shot of Sarah fully naked, gleaming with water, bending over to pick up her clothes, nipples dangling softly down. Her eyes grew.

"How did you get that!!!!?????"
"oh, don't you remember today in chemistry? i just happened to be right behind you....hehe"

She snatched his phone, and immediately went through and erased all 15 pictures, while he sat calmly. "It's too late, dear, they are already sitting in my inbox." He had a wicked smile. Before she could say anything he moved his hand farther up her leg, and said "Listen. You will be my slave for the rest of the week. I know your parents are gone, and I know where you live. I'm coming home with you right now. You will call me master, and I will call you slave. If you disobey I will send these pictures to every teacher's email in the school, and slip them in every locker."

She was petrified. "oh...uh....okkkk...."

"Yes, and I believe this is your stop?"

"Mhm....well allright then...."

She, with her virgin mind, though this was some stupid game, like hide and go seek. She had never, ever heard of a master slave relationship, and had never even been in any sexual relationship with anyone. That's why she wasn't immediately worried.

They walked off the bus up to her mailbox, and he stopped her. "Wait." He took hold of her shirt and began to lift it.

"Wha...what are you doing you FREAK?!!! Get offa me!!!"

"EXCUSE ME? I AM YOUR MASTER. YOU ARE MY SLAVE. YOU WILL DO AS I WISH WITHOUT QUESTION." He continued.

"You are a sick freak! I'm not playing your stupid perverted games!!!! Go away!" With that she pushed him away.

"Alright slave, for this you will be punished." He pulled out one of the pictures from his back pocket, it seemed like he had a whole stack ready. He flagged down a car with a couple of teen boys their age, also coming home from school. "Here", he said as they rolled down the window. "Take this picture, and keep it. Do whatever you want with it. It is of my friend right here." As soon as the boys saw it their eyes lit up, but they could not take it, as Sarah snatched it away, "FINE, I will do what you say!!!! I'm sorry!!!"

"There you go. Well go ahead and give these boys a show."

She reluctantly, and slowly lifted her tight fitting cotton shirt, exposing her pink bra and energetic breasts. The guys in the car cheered, and slowly drove away.

"Now how do you feel, slave? That is only a minor punishment. If you disobey me again, it will be much, much worse." They walked to her front door, Sarah with no shirt feeling exposed to the world, and went in.

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qwertypete 04-30-2008 06:03 PM

GREAT start.,.. can't wait for more!

Ghost 04-30-2008 06:10 PM

like the story....
the picture.... as a mystery.. ahh

vampire_girl 04-30-2008 06:36 PM

i love this story :) please continue

pierced_princess77 04-30-2008 07:09 PM

When will teh next part be here????!!!!

Insanity 04-30-2008 07:26 PM

Part 2
 
Once they got inside, Eric set down his backpack and unzipped it. He pulled out some cameras. He mounted the cameras all around the house, one in the living room, one in the kitchen, one in the entrance hall, one in her bedroom. However, he did not place one in any of the bathrooms.

"These will stay on, and feed directly to my laptop, which is at my house. I live 5 minutes away from here. Right now I gotta go get some stuff to prepare for this week. EVEN though I am gone, you are STILL MY SLAVE. I will be back sometime or another. You must spend all of your time in your underwear, starting now. You will sleep with no covers, on your bed. I will be checking up on you." He notioned towards the camera that was mounted in the kitchen, in the corner of the wall.

"Yes,.....master."

"That's a good slave. Now take those pants off and I will go."

Sarah slowly unbuttoned her tight fitting jeans, and lowered them, showing a blue cotton thong, with frills along the top. "Oh my," said Eric, "That will be nice to look at. Your one sexy slave, much better than all the other ones..." With that he slapped her on her firm, round ass and walked out the door. She let out a little girly squeal.

Now she got to thinking. What could she do? He's had other slaves before? Who is this guy? She thought long and hard, sitting there on the bottom step of her stairs, and realized there was nothing she could do. She couldn't risk complete humiliation.

She went on normally, feeling the cameras wherever she went, knowing that Eric could see her smooth, tan legs and flat stomach, her low cut panties and tiny bra. She felt completely exposed, and it strangely turned her on a bit. She noticed her panties were a little wet, and it embarrassed her. How was this kid manipulating her so easily?

She went to sleep without the covers, like he said, feeling like a lab rat.

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She woke up the next morning, and everything was normal. She walked downstairs (in her underwear, of course) and the cool breeze felt weird against her exposed thighs. When she walked in the kitchen, she saw a suitcase on the floor next to the counter, and realized Eric had come back.

"Good morning, slave."

"AHHH!!! you scared me!! uhh....i mean, good morning master."

Eric was standing behind her. He walked up to her and undid her bra. She moaned like a baby as it fell to the floor. "You will make me breakfast, and it better be good. I will make yours after you make mine." She wondered what he meant.

As she started breakfast, he went in the living room and turned the TV on. She brought him the food and he ate viciously. "Now heres yours", he said. He pointed to a glass on the table that was filled with some whit substance. "What is that?" she asked, as she had never seen stuff like it before. "CUM", he said bluntly.

"What? I'm not drinking that!!!!"
"Fine then." He grabbed her and ripped her panties off. She stood there in shocked and covered up her cute pussy. She had never been naked in the presence of anyone before, and it turned her on. He laid her down on the table, and got up on top of her, his dick in her face. "Suck it", he commanded. Before she had time to respond he shoved his cock into her virgin mouth, and she almost gagged. He began to fuck her face, and her pussy with a dildo. She moaned and moaned. It was so unexpected.

Finally he released his load in her mouth, and pulled out. She was stunned. "Swallow it", he told her. She did, in one big gulp, with a foul look on her face. "That is what you get when you don't follow orders." He then went around to her pussy, which had not quite made it to orgasm, and shoved his still throbbing penis into it. He then released a stream of piss inside her, and she wimpered at the warm liquid being injected inside her. When he was relieved he sent her to pee it back out in the bathroom. "If any comes back out on the way you must lick it up." Luckily she kept it all in just in time for the toilet. It made her horny that she was filled with his juices.

When she came back, he made her lick up the pussy juices from the table. She did it with pleasure. She was both shocked and somewhat liking this sudden change in events, but she still didn't know if she could handle it.

He pulled out some clothes from his bag. "We're going to the mall. You will wear these." Her outfit consisted of a tight white shirt, and a miniskirt. "Take what shoes you want" he said. They walked out of the door and got in his car, and he grinned at how high the miniskirt came when she sat down in the car seat.

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They were cruising through town, on the way to the mall. "When we get there, you will have tasks to complete. You must flip your skirt up, exposing your ass to 3 different guys, in 3 different stores. You must spill a water on your chest at some point. You must drop your skirt 2 times for 30 seconds inside 2 different stores. You must find two chairs facing eachother, with one chair taken, and sit in the other with your legs wide open."

"Yes, master", replied Sarah, sounding somewhat scared.

"There is a catch", added Eric, "For every crack you step on, I will roll your skirt up one fold. If you touch any clothes at all, I will stick a butt plug in your ass. If we walk out of the mall in an hour and you haven't completed all of the tasks, you must leave your clothes on a car with black rims, and be nude until we get home. Understood?"

"Yes, master."

"Good. Let the fun begin."

uareapossum 04-30-2008 07:55 PM

wow you are a really good writer please continue :)

pierced_princess77 05-01-2008 03:04 AM

This is getting good...please go on!

vampire_girl 05-01-2008 05:37 AM

wow, this keeps getting better :)

dared to perfection 05-01-2008 09:06 AM

plus rep ++++ i love this story one of my fave styles

Insanity 05-01-2008 03:57 PM

Sarah walked nervously into the crowded (Saturday) mall, carefully avoiding the cracks, and Eric followed silently behind her. Her miniskirt was flapping back and forth as she walked, and every once in a while it flipped high enough to just barely see the bottom of her crack. He was liking this.

The first thing they saw was a sitting area. Sarah looked at Eric, and he nodded. "You know what to do" he instructed her. She walked up to the only empty chair, across from an old man reading a newspaper, and sat down. Eric gave her a head notion, and she slowly spread her legs, her already tiny miniskirt naturally hiking up her legs. She felt cool air on her little pussy and it felt good. She sat nervously, and waited for Eric's motion to get up, but he did not give it. Instead he walked away to the bathroom and left her there. She waited and waited, the old man eventually getting up and not noticing. The only person that noticed was a little boy who passed by, looked awkwardly at her crotch, and continued. She knew he did not understand. Finally Eric came back, tapping on her shoulder.

"Fun?" he asked.

"Sure, master. Can I get up now?"

"Yes, go ahead, and consider your self 1 task down. Come this way." She got up, adjusting her skirt, and proceeded down the main hall of the mall. She was getting a mixture of mean looks, stares, and people blatantly checking her out (boys AND girls). Eric stopped and pointed. "You can either go in the DVD store, or the book store for your next task, and you must complete two." She chose the book store, and led Eric into the back. Then he grabbed her, "You can drop them right here."

"buh...but were not even hidden. Theres a glass wall here!" They were behind a bookcase, but the wall was glass,and you could see right out into a mall entrance way. Eric reached down and dropped her skirt immediately, and she just half made a motion to pick it back up, but thought about it and just stood there pouty. There were a few people entering, but only one guy saw her, obviously staring. She felt so helpless, which she was.

Suddenly, a security guard walked by, glancing in, and his eyes grew wide. "oh crap!!!" exclaimed Sarah, pulling her skirt back up quickly. He beckoned with his finger for them to come out there to him. Eric was caught off guard, but kept his cool, for he had a plan.

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As they got out the security guard began yelling, but Eric pushed Sarah aside and walked up to have a private conversation with him. Sarah watched as a grin slowly lit up the guard's face, and was very confused. Eric came back up to Sarah and put a blindfold around her. Sarah just walked and walked, and finally when they stopped her, Eric took the blindfold off, and she realized that they were in some strange room. It was empty, except for a few tables. She figured they were still in the mall, they couldn't have walked far. Then Eric walked out, and shut the door behind him. "Master?"

Out of nowhere she felt hands on her hips as she was bent over the table. Then those same hands slid down to her ass and opened it wide, exposing her tiny, pink asshole. She felt something warm and hard slide into it, and yelped with pain as it split her hole. Suddenly it got faster and faster, and she screamed out in pain. Pretty soon it all stopped, though, as she felt a warm creamy liquid shoot into her butthole, and the object removed. She was then picked up and placed on her back on the table, and she realized what had just happened. It was the security guard! He had just anally fucked her, and now he was walking up to her with his cock, stained slightly brown. "Clean it off, bitch" he muttered, and she hesitated, then he shoved it into her mouth and began licking off the poo residue from her own ass. It was completely disgusting to her.

He then took out his nightstick, and rammed it into her pussy. "OWHHHHHH!!!". He moved it back and forth, faster and faster, and she jerked up and down with pleasure as the huge object slammed her vagina. She had an orgasm, and then he left her, still in her miniskirt and white shirt, lying on the table, exasperated.

Eric came back, "Get up now, bitch, you still got tasks to complete. I dearly hope you pleasured that cop enough, because your crime life depended on it." She nodded to him that she did, and he brought her out of the door, down a short hall, and through another door back into the main part of the mall. "Alright," he said, "Since we are shorter on time because of that, I will reduce your tasks to only 1 butt flash, and you still have to spill that water. That can be the last thing you do. HOWEVER, on your little blind trip you seemed to have stepped on quite a few cracks. That deserves punishment." He reached down to the waistline of her skirt, and rolled it up once, twice, thrice, FOUR times. The lower half of her butt was now completely visible, and on every step if she wasn't careful it sprang up in the front to reveal some pussy hair. She was completely self conscious, but turned on.

As they continued walking, she felt the cum still in her ass from the police officer, and focused her attention on holding it in, and not stepping on cracks. They walked into a clothing store, her still careful not to touch anything, and Eric beckoned for her to come over to him next to a guy. She though this guy was pretty cute...he had blonde hair, hazelnut eyes, somewhat tight-fitting jeans and an exotic muscular build. He checked her out as well in her extremely tight and tiny clothes, and she was aroused by it. "I'll just do it" she thought, and walked by him, looking straight at him and flicked her ass up towards him, completely exposing the roundness and firmness of her perfect behind. However, this hot guy took her mind off things, specifically the cum still in her ass, and it accidently spewed out, all over the guy who she was trying to give a treat to! Eric grinned in his watch position, and the guy flipped out. "UGHHH....what the f*&%^?????? Who the hell are you slut??"

"Oh!...OH! I'm sooo sorryyyy!!!" She ran away in shame, she had never been so embarrassed in her life! The cum was still oozing down her leg, and people were staring at intently at her sluttyness.

Eric nonchalantly walked up to the guy, handed him a 20 dollar bill and a couple nude pictures of Sarah (with the head edited out), and walked away. He caught up to her.

"Alright SLAVE, that was a terrible move, and you will be PUNISHED FOR THAT. How DARE you run away like that, you should have licked EVERY DROP from his pants and offered to do MORE at that! COME HERE."

She walked, wimpering towards him and he lifted up the back of her skirt and shoved a butt plug into her ass. "AHHughhh" she cried. "THAT WAY NO MORE WILL COME OUT. But that's not all of your punishment. GO to the food court and finish your last task, and we are leaving!"

They walked to the food court quickly, the butt plug was spreading her cheeks apart, and showed it's bulge when the skirt pressed against it. She walked weirdly because of it. As they got there, he got her a water, led her to the middle of the court, and said "Put on a show." She thought a second, then started slowly walking, and acted like she tripped. "Ah!" she exclaimed, and spilled the water all over her frontside, and her now see-through shirt suctioned itself to her tiny but luscious boobs. Her nipples were hard, and many people watched in astonishment at her figure. Some took pictures. She immediately looked towards Eric with a painful look like "lets leave", and he nodded. They began walking towards the entrance they came in from.

As they were walking, Eric spoke. "I hope you had fun today slave. Did you?"
"Yes sir, master, I had tons of fun."

"What did you enjoy about it, specifically?"

"I loved it when I was exposed and helpless, and when the man screwed me hard, master."

"Sounds like your one horny slave! Well you still have your punishment, so follow me." He led her into the boys bathroom. "You will pee, and poop in the urinal, where men stand to pee. Right now there is no one in here, but if anyone does enter, if they say anything, you must offer to give them a blowjob. This must go on until you are finished with your business. I will be in the closed stall adjacent to your open one, and I will be listening."

"Okay, master."

She reluctantly went over to the stand-up urinal, and sat on the lip of it. "Uhhh, no" Eric said, "You must drop that skirt. Like a real lady." She slipped it down her legs, and he took it into the stall with him.

Sarah felt so weird, the edge of the stall was cold, and digging into her crotch, making her turned on. In exhilarated her that anyone could walk in any second.

While Eric was in the stall, he just sat and listened. He looked closely at the skirt and found many stains from, he guessed vaginal secretions. There was also one of cum from the guard. Then he heard someone come in. His footsteps stopped momentarily in shock, but then went into the stall next to Eric, did his business, and left without washing his hands. A few more guys came in but did not say anything but a surprised look.

Then a younger kid, about 14 came in. He looked like trouble. He immediately went up to Sarah and started talking to her. "Well" he said, "I'm gonna do what I came here to do." He unzipped his pants right in front of her and pulled out his tiny 14 year old penis, and began peeing right on Sarah as she was attempting to poop. The warm piss ran down her stomach, through the lips of her vagina and down the loaf of crap that was being extruded by her asshole. She couldn't say anything, but she was thinking "I'm being taken advantage of by a 14 year old!!!!" Still, it turned her on a little. After he finished, he heard an "ahem" from the stall next to her, and remembered about what she had to do. "Ummm, do you want me to give you a bj?"

"Wha? YEAH MAN DO THAT!!!!! I never had one before but my friends talk about it all the time!"

She got down on her knees and took hold of the tiny cock, and enrobed it with her mouth. She felt the boy shiver with delight. She began the process, and the boy just stood there with his hand on her head. She was almost double his size, but she was kneeled over sucking his cock! He had completely authority over her! After only a little bit he jizzed in her mouth his 14 year old clear jizz, and he walked away without another word. She spit it out in the urinal just as her master walked out from the stall, and he didn't notice. "That was a good job slave. Now you can go home, rest and get ready for tomorrow."

She went home wearing all of her clothes, and passed out on her bed, dreaming of the strange events that had just occurred. Eric sat downstairs and formulated his plans for the rest of the week.

AverageDaniel 05-01-2008 04:17 PM

This story is great, as is your writing. Keep it up, man.

uareapossum 05-01-2008 06:19 PM

This is my favorite story so far good job

Ghost 05-01-2008 07:43 PM

Xtream... wow.. nice job

Bebe_Gurl 05-01-2008 09:03 PM

I'm impressed, I go off for 2 days and I'm welcomed back with this! I love it, I'm + repping!

Insanity 05-02-2008 01:37 PM

As Sarah was sleeping, Eric sat downstairs and contemplated his time with the hot girl. The TV was silently playing it's pictures across the walls of the room. It was dark, and peaceful, and the softly swaying grass outside the door knew no intrusion. Everything was calm.

Eric got up and went into Sarah's room. She could see her rounded chest rising...falling slowly. She had no covers. He slowly and delicately pulled her worn out skirt down her slender legs, and across the tops of her smooth feet. He then carefully cut away her cheap white shirt. He reveled on her naked body, she gently turned her head in unconscious response. He took a few more pictures, and began to make his preparations.

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As Sarah woke up, she felt cold. "Why am I naked?" she thought to herself. The two slits of an image grew into a full picture, and she realized that she wasn't in her room anymore. She was outside! In her backyard!

Her backyard was closed in by trees. She glanced around, and wasn't worried, as nobody lived near her. It exhilarated her to be completely naked outside! Once she realized where she was, she realized what she was laying on. It was a strange contraption. She was positioned on a long piece of plywood, laying at an angle on some kind of support, about 80 degrees from the ground. Not quite vertical. Her arms were raised above her, her wrists handcuffed to chains that went over the top of the flat piece of wood and attached to something she couldn't see. She looked down, and her legs were spread out as far as they would go, folded up so her knees were almost at her shoulder level, and her feet at the level of her butt. They were also strapped in. She couldn't move.

Then she looked closer, and realized that just under her butt was a dildo that extended all the way to the ground! She was being suspended by the chains, just above it, and if they were loosened she would slide down the plywood onto it! It was a good 4 feet long! She also saw a box at the bottom of it, and a a few cords running to behind the plank. She was petrified. She had never experience anything like this before!

Then Eric came up. "Good morning slave. Sleep well?"

"Yes, master. What is this?"

"This, oh this is our fun for today. Before we get started, I'm sure your hungry. Would you like something to eat?"

"Yes please!!!!" she replied. He fed her breakfast by hand, every once in a while accidentally spilling something on her and licking it up, obviously on purpose. He giggled when he got to lick her nipples clean. She could barely handle his rough tongue.

Once she finished, he left for a bit. She sat there wondering what was gonna happen. Then he came back with a another girl. "Today we are starting a business. You will please anyone who comes in here with your mouth, as they are well paying customers. If they feel like you haven't done good enough, these chains will be loosened, and I'm sure you know what that means." The girl walked up to her right away and began making out with Sarah. Sarah could not believe she was doing this with a girl! The customer probed her tongue deep inside Sarah's little mouth, and filled it with her spit. It was quite sloppy. The whole time Sarah was being straddled, and the girl moved her hands up and down Sarah's hips and thighs, every once in a while clenching them. The girl's jeans rubbed agaisnt her clit, and sent chills through her body. After she was done she walked away.

Then a guy came in. He immediately dropped his pants, and shoved his cock into Sarah's face. It wasn't even hard at first, and she felt it squirm around in her mouth loosely, and it felt weird. As it hardened, she tasted a little precum in the back of her throat. Sarah didn't even have any hands free, she was completely helpless, she couldn't even move anything but her head. She was fucked for 10 minutes by the guy, who had many tattoos, and a giant dick that hit the back of Sarah's mouth and stretched her lips. As expected, his load was huge, and it took Sarah 3 full gulps to swallow the salty, slimy liquid.

Then, another girl came. She started kissing again, but this time she had more plans. She dropped her pants and motioned to Eric, who was simply watching. Sarah felt the board being lowered flat, and the girl jumped on Sarah's face, burying it in her crotch. Sarah didn't know what to do, she had never performed oral sex on a girl before! She just licked it, and the girl could tell her inexperience. "Penetrate me!" the girl screamed. Sarah pushed her tongue into the girl's hole, and felt (and tasted) a stream of pussy juice come back into her mouth. She couldn't get over the taste, but kept going. Eventually the girl got up, and walked out. "One more single" Eric muttered. Sarah had no clue what that meant.

Another girl came in, this time making Sarah give her a rim job. Sarah licked her asshole round and round, her tongue teeming from the horrible flavor. "When is this gonna end?" she thought. Finally the girl got off, kissed her on the cheek and said "thanks hun" and left.

Eric stepped in. "It seems that second girl was dissatisfied with your performance." Sarah just looked at him like a baby. He raised the contraption back up to it's previous point, and lowered the chains. Sarah slid slowly, and helplessly down. She felt her already spread butthole touch the end of the cold metal dildo, which was already pregreased for her. Her body weight slowly slipped the dildo deep into her ass, over a foot of it. She wimpered in pain, the pressure of the rod was immense on her insides.

Then, without notice, many teenage guys her age began surrounding her, all with their dicks hanging out of their pants. A look of shock from Sarah greeted them, mixed with her face of pain from the massive dildo. They all began to wank, and were crowded very close to her. One tall guy got up and made her give him oral, and another (with a condom) began fucking her pussy. At the same time the dildo began pulsing, and went back and forth from vibrating to twisting to giving her a small shock(painless, but still felt). All of these things happening at once were completely stunning to her. She felt soooo good, she couldn't even handle it. She moaned, screamed loudly, both in delight and as someone who was being completely taken control over. After a while 5 or 6 guys began cumming all over her body, her nipples, her stomach, her legs, and she was covered in warm semen. They rubbed their penises all over her, careful to get the last drops out onto her skin. The other 8 or 9 guys were passing around a tube, which connected to a hose, that they were sticking their dicks in and releasing cum into. "What is that?" she thought. Suddenly, she found out. She felt a jet of warm fluid up her ass from the dildo. Over and over again it let loose inside her, it was almost a constant stream. The man juice from 9 guys was being injected and mixed inside her! Then, the guy in her mouth let loose his cum, and it filled her mouth completely, and some of it came dribbling out when he pulled out. The guys then left, leaving her completely exhilarated, and amazed, for she had just been gangbanged! She looked down on her naked body, and it was covered in a thick layer of creamy white jizz. It ran between her reddened pussy lips, between her perfect, white boobs that hosted rock solid nipples, down her chin and neck, and through the gaps in her toes. She still couldn't move.

Eric then walked up, smiling, and put a pill in her mouth. She immediately passed out, still feeling the revulsion from the biggest orgasm she had ever experienced.

Naughtybaby 05-02-2008 02:26 PM

I like the story please continue

vampire_girl 05-02-2008 03:35 PM

wow, this is really great
i hope their will be a next part :)

Bebe_Gurl 05-02-2008 08:44 PM

This is utterly awesome!

AM.PM 05-02-2008 10:27 PM

OMG!!!This is such an amazing story!Keep going I want to know what Eric does to sarah. I have people in my school who are like Eric (quite and are shy type) and now I am starting to think that they might allways horny!LOLZ

tissue13 05-02-2008 11:09 PM

omg! this is an amazing story! please continue!

SubMissChievous 05-02-2008 11:21 PM

Yes it is a very well-written story. Unfortunately for the younger members of this site the content of this story makes it more suitable for the Mature stories section & will be moved there.

Ghost 05-03-2008 08:01 PM

Great story.....
Is like nothing else can't happen to her...
and u get something out of the blue.... great job

Insanity 05-03-2008 08:17 PM

I will continue the story tomorrow, I have been quite busy. Thanks all for the support I appreciate the feedback! What a warm welcome for someone new to the site. I have some new ideas and they will be up soon!

Insanity 05-04-2008 12:36 PM

"Ughhhhh." Sarah stirred. She was sitting on the floor, her back against a pole. She opened her eyes slowly, and saw that she was surrounded by a hanging white sheet. She moved her arm. There was a slight crackling sound. She opened her mouth. Same sound. She looked closer and realized she was STILL covered in cum, only it was completely dry now. It was a solid layer on the whole front of her body. "Man, they really went at it!" she thought. Her eyes moved down her body. She was completely covered, from her chin to her toes, where the gaps where filled. Her vagina wasn't even visible, the liquid had run down her pussy lips constantly until it formed a stolid mass that cemented it shut. Her nipples had extra thick layers on them. Every time she moved, it cracked and made slight noise.

She tried to stand up. BOOM! "owwwww!" She hit her head on the bottom of the wooden table. She was under a table? "What the heck?" she said to herself. "THAT'S what the white sheets are." Then her hunger hit her. She hadn't eaten in forever! She looked around, on the other side of the pole (The table's support) she found a box with a key on it, and a note.

-----Good evening, Sarah, this is your master. You are NOT to leave this table until I come and get you. You are outside, in a plaza outside a restaurant. We have more business here. In this box is some toast, a salad without dressing, and a glass with some lemonade mix in it and a spoon. This is your dinner. HOWEVER, like always, there is a catch. The butter on the toast must be fresh cum, the salad dressing must be fresh cum, and the water for the lemonade must be the same. You must also put a little female juice in the lemonade for flavor. You MAY NOT eat it if this requirement is not satisfied. Remember, I am watching you.


P.S. the key is where the journey ends-----

"Shit. The journey ends? Where the hell is that?" As she began to really listen she heard car motors driving by, pedestrian footsteps, conversation. She was really in the middle of public, naked, covered in dried up jizz! This worried her but made her horny at the same time. After thinking for a while she realized that he meant the food journey, and reached in her butt for the key. She found it shoved WAY up there, so far it hurt pulling her hand back out. She cursed Eric and his stupid ideas.

After opening the box she found all the items as expected. "But how the heck am I supposed to get all that cum?" she was thinking. She couldn't get it off her body, as it was all dried up. Then, without warning, 4 people sat down at the table, their legs now surrounding Sarah. She got a little worried. Then they all unzipped their pants and whipped out their cocks! They just let them hang there, and Sarah could hear them ordering from the waitress. "How the heck does Eric do this?" she thought, "Well here goes nothing."

She grabbed the first cock with her hand and began wanking it. It got harder and harder, and pretty soon she could feel it twitching like it was ready. She held up the toast to it and it sprayed away. Still feeling very hungry, she began eating the sticky toast, the now familiar cum flavor prevalent in her mouth. She did the same with the 3 other gentlemen, with the remaining toast. She felt so horny shuffling around butt naked with a hard shell of cum all over her. Her pussy dripped in excitement every time she moved her legs, as it rubbed against the lump of semen lodged inside her hole. She began pressing that lump as she was working on the dicks around her, and she felt increasingly pleasured.

It took four men to make enough salad dressing, and she gorged it down, the saltiest salad she ever ate. She moved on to the lemonade, and like on cue a girl sat down in a skirt and lowered her black lace thong. Sarah fingered her for 10 minutes straight, holding the glass under her pussy to collect the fresh juice. She then topped it off with more cum, and mixed it with the spoon. It was the weirdest thing she had ever eaten. By that time she herself orgasmed, the cement around her covered in her juices.

She then was done. She didn't know what to do. The people left, and it got dark. The bustling of the pedestrians and cars stopped, and the grasshoppers began their night cry. It was silent. A hand slid another box under the table. It was filled with clothes. Well, not that many. It was a pair of low cut pink cotton panties with "slut" written in white letters on the butt, which stretched tight when she wore it. There was a bra that only had small circles to cover her nipples. The rest of her boob stood firm and exposed, and a little whiter than the rest of her skin. She heard a voice, the voice of Eric: "come out". She popped her head out, and saw him standing there. She briefly glanced around to see that there was no-one else and came out. She was wearing only those two garments, and felt the cool air on her body and it turned her on. Immediately a wet spot formed in her thin cotton panties. Eric beckoned for her to follow. "We are walking home."

She followed shyly, her little bare feet moving silently across the once busy sidewalk. Her petite buttcheeks taking turns sticking out and stretching the tight, wet panties. Her supple breasts bouncing slightly, barely held by the skimpy bra. Her nipples were visibly hard.

She guessed it was around midnight. The moon was bright an full. They walked for 30 minutes, until the neighborhood was familiar and they opened her front door. By that time she was so exhilarated from being exposed she begged her master to let her have an orgasm. He told her to go take a shower and get the cum off, which was extremely hard to do. It took her over 30 minutes. After she was done, he sent her to sleep outside, in the middle of her backyard where the wooden contraption assisted in her being fucked that morning. She lay on a blanket under the full moon which gently illuminated her curvy figure, her smooth skin, her thin frame. She was exposed to the world, Eric's cameras watching from the house where he slept in her bed.

Pikachu 05-04-2008 11:01 PM

Very nice story well done...

please for all our sakes keep it up:D

Insanity 05-05-2008 04:23 PM

As Sarah woke up, she heard snickering. She looked over by the fence, and saw two young boys staring down at her barely-dressed body. She thrust her hands in front of her crotch, "GET OUTTA HERE!" They ran off, still laughing. She opened the porch screen door and walked inside.

"Eric?"

There was no answer. She searched the house, but found nobody, not a soul. "Hmmm. Well I guess I will take this chance to get something good to eat." She dug through her pantry, and fixed herself a nice breakfast. She plopped down on the sofa, still in her skimpy underwear. He nipple popped out but she didn't notice. After she was almost done she saw someone out of the corner of her eye. It was Eric. "BITCH, did I tell you that you could eat some damn breakfast!?!? And you made none for your master? You will be severely punished for this you worthless slave girl!" With that he walked over and knocked the plate out of her hands, picked her up and threw her on the floor. He sat down where she was, pulled her up by her bra-straps (both nipples hanging loosely now) and laid her over his knee. He ripped her panties down and off her flailing legs, and stuffed them in her mouth. Her voice could be heard through the fabric but it was not clearing what she was saying. He began to spanking her, hard, on her bare white ass. With every drop of the hand, she let out a muffled moan, and her eyes welled with tears.

He continued spanking her, until her little butt was bright pink. Then out of nowhere he stuck a vibrator in between the smooth cheeks. On full blast! Her body lurched as it jammed in her sensitive pink hole, and she screamed into the salty slut-panties. He pumped it back and forth, and with the other hand caressed and squeezed her boobs. The previously bumpy purple dildo turned a little brown, and her face turned a quite red. Sweat ran down her back and between her butt, onto the dildo, only providing more lubrication. After 5 minutes he blatantly turned her over onto the couch and began fucking her ass himself. Her legs were raised behind her head, like a baby being wiped. Her pussy juices ran down onto his cock, and eventually into her ass. She clenched the pillow with her hands, and gritted her teeth. He breathed heavily. Soon he released a huge load in her ass, and sent her to go clean up.

As she was turning the knob to start the shower, still panting, he came in behind her and slapped her on her bruised ass. She winced. "One more thing" he said. "Lay down in the tub." She did, and he began peeing all over her. The warm liquid felt good to her, it drenched her hair, and filled the bottom of the tub. She was now lying in a vat of warm man-piss. It kinda made her excited. She began to sit up, but he reached down his hand and pushed her back down. He then dropped his pants, and squatted on top of her, exposing his extremely hairy ass. He pitched a loaf on her stomach, a huge loaf to be specific, and then proceeded to rub it all over her. Her whole chest and stomach was not covered in brown poo, and he took the remainder of the shit, a long piece, and shoved it into her vagina. He squeezed every bit of it in there, reaching in deep to making sure it was thoroughly filled with crap. Only then was he satisfied. He slapped her face with his soft penis and walked out to wash his hands.

Sarah was completely stunned. She had never done ANYTHING like that before, her breath had never slowed down at all. She was so turned on she started masturbating right there, with all the poo filling her pussy. Her fingers felt the squishy inside as it pierced her lips...harder, harder, and it made a nasty, sloppy sound like no other. Before long she had a massive orgasm. She let out a huge scream and her body lifted off the bottom of the tub, coming back down with a resounding slop. She then opened the drain, and began the arduous task of cleaning herself off....and out.

She came back down in her towel (she had not been instructed to put anything else on) and Eric was sitting at the kitchen table eating breakfast, and reading a magazine. "Go get the newspaper" he commanded. With slight hesitation she opened the front door and walked outside to the mailbox in only her towel. It wasn't in there. But, the newspaper man was coming round. As he pulled up he was obviously checking her out. She held out her hand, and he overlooked them, jamming the newspaper in the gap between her boobs. In surprise she let go of her towel, and it fell with the newspaper to the ground. He whistled in excitement! She, most embarrassed, grabbed everything and ran inside, and the newspaper guy followed her ass in the whole time. He could just see the drooping lips of her vagina between her legs.

"Well, slave. Get dressed."

"With what, master?"

"What's in your hand, duh."

She looked down at the newspaper in disbelief. "This? This is a newspaper!"

"Ahem." He looked menacing.

"I mean, yes master. How do you supposed I do that?"

"You can cut it out and fashion it any way you like, but anyhow it is what your wearing today for our adventures. It will be fun."

She reached in the kitchen drawer and grabbed some scissors and tape. She walked upstairs, head sulking, dragging the towel at her feet.

Ghost 05-05-2008 11:25 PM

New paper.. wow
can i read it.. mean while she is getting ready..:p
just kidding...

Nice story

jjjj 05-06-2008 03:43 PM

wow this is really good and insanity i +repped ypu for such a great sturymake sure it stays that way (launches extremly menacing glare at insanity) got it!good now finish writing

jjjj 05-06-2008 03:44 PM

wow this is really good and insanity i +repped ypu for such a great sturymake sure it stays that way (launches extremly menacing glare at insanity) got it!good now finish writing

Insanity 05-06-2008 07:38 PM

"What will I do?" she thought. She began cutting the newspaper into a pair of panties, taping the sides together and slipping it snugly onto her smooth hips. She did the same with the bra, the straps were a little big, but it held her perfect boobs fairly well. She then began her attempt at making a shirt. She ended up with a crumpled mess that ended at her bellybutton. "Well that's gotta do" she figured. She then used long strips of tape to make pants that were tight fitting, as she didn't have much paper left. "No shoes" she realized. She walked back downstairs, crinkling with every step. "That's pretty good I guess" Eric mentioned nonchalantly. "Come on, lets go."

They hopped in the car, Eric behind wheel, and began riding, eventually getting to the interstate. Sarah did her hair in the mirror, checked the snugness of her outfit repeatedly, applied some makeup. Before long they were on the interstate, and Sarah was lost. "Uhm, where are we going, master?"

"Shut up slave. Jeez."

"Sorry."

Then he exited down the ramp. "Well if your so damn bored, give me a blowjob." Sarah unzipped his pants and pulled it out. She stroked it in the way she was so used to by now, and it became erect quickly. She sucked it while he was driving, and he enjoyed it very much. The cum hit the back of her mouth hard, and she swallowed it without trouble. Then she looked up, and they were in a huge parking lot, filled with many cars. The sign above them told her that they were at an amusement park, and she could hear the screams of the roller coaster riders in the distance. "You sure are creative, master. I am most delighted to have such a master as yourself."

"Gracias. Get out and lets go in the park."

From this point it seemed normal. Everyone stared, of course, but she wasn't exposed, or on any specific task. The thin and tight newspaper outlined her butt clearly, as well as her chest. A few rips formed at her ankles, but she was ok.

They went to within the park, and Eric took her on a roller coaster. As they went down the first drop she screamed, naturally, and same with the second. The third, however, was not a scream of excitement. Her top ripped and blew right off! The ride picture showed her awkward bra made of thin newspaper, which made her boobs look pointy, and the people at the photo booth snickered as she walked by. "Well that certainly was interesting" Eric made note. Now she felt much more self conscious, as it was like she was walking around in a bra!

Eric then walked her far across the park, and before long she was dazed at all the scenery. She had never been to this park before, and she found it amazing. Well, with this bewilderment, she didn't notice that they were walking right into a "wet zone" and she got sprayed with a jet of water. It hit right at her butt. Immediately the wet newspaper gave way, and her white, tender (and wet) butt was now exposed to public. Eric slapped it in pleasure "Well that's a nice view! You need to watch where your walking idiot." "Oh my gosh...." Sarah whispered subtly.

Then they went on another coaster. As they were in the line, Eric finally gave some masterful commands. "You are to find some guy that is completely ugly, a completely loser, and offer to masturbate him during the ride. Try your best to get him to cum, and aim it on your crotch, where it will be soaked up nicely." A simple reply: "Yes, master."

She found the guy. He was short, had greasy red hair and a face covered in zits. He was alone, with his huge rimmed glasses and pants up to his bellybutton. She silently whispered her offer to him, and he accepted happily. As they moved out of the station, she immediately unzipped his pants, to reveal tighty whities. With a groan she undid his belt, and slipped his pants down, then his tight underwear to reveal an extremely tiny penis, that was already fully erect. She stroked it fast, and he cried out, his voice mixing with the screams of the other passengers. It was hectic, and crazy, as they were being jerked every which way. Sarah was just focusing on his pecker, which displayed under itself a pair of marble sized balls. She began to rub these too, and she felt his never-been-touched-before penis begin to constrain itself. She pulled it sideways, and the clear cum leaped across the seat in between her spread legs. The newspaper soaked it up, and it formed a visibly damp spot on her crotch. She closed him back up, and gave him a peck on the cheek, just in time for the ride to come to a halt. "PHEW!" she exhaled. She proudly strutted up to her master, showing off her wet spot of cum that had now already reached her pussy skin, under all that newspaper.

People stared at her butt, stared at her breasts, stared at her whole outfit. Eric looked back at them with a grin. Sarah did with a helpless expression. Eric resumed "Now you must do the same thing you just did, with yourself, on the teapots." She reluctantly boarded the ride, and began to rub her pussy under the layers of paper. The motion of the ride and the vibrating of the seat made her sooo horny, and she had 2 orgasms by the time it stopped. Her hair was a little damp from sweat, and her crotch was even darker with secretions. Then, when she stood up, she realized something bad. The friction had caused the rip on her butt to extend down and all the way around to the bottom of the frontside of her pussy. Her lips were against nothing but air, but it was not visible from the front, only from someone at eye level of her butt. However, this was a hilly park, and more oftentimes she was on a path that ran beside a lower one, and those people were at just that level. She compensated best she could by keeping her legs tight as she walked, increasing the crinkling sound and squeezing her slightly drooping lips between her now slightly sweaty legs.

They walked on, Sarah completely unaware of what would come next. Her outfit was falling apart, and with it, Eric's plan was going along perfectly.

Insanity 05-07-2008 03:17 PM

Eric led her to the roman rapids ride. He took her by the shoulder and began walking her over to the changing rooms. They were 2 open archways (one male, one female) that opened up under a canopy. "Go in and take that off, and come back out to get your bathing suit." She said "Yes sir," but thought "WHAT? Theres absolutely no cover but a few pillars! This is a crowded park!" She glided through the doorway, and proceeded to an area to her right. She slipped off the makeshift bra, and crinkled off the pants. All that was left was the panties that looked like a diaper. They were stained, and ripped. Only a small connection prevented them from becoming but a front flap. She cautiously came back out to the archway. Eric was still standing there. "Here you go, slave." He was holding a one piece bathing suit. "Wow" she thought, "maybe he's giving me a break? This isn't revealing at all!" However, Eric didn't move. He just held it out. He was standing outside the arch, and to get to it she would have to walk in plain view of the many people passing by. She hopped to it, and ran up as quickly as she could. Her boobs bounced up and down and her but jiggled with each step. She snatched the swimsuit and turned around. Then, BAM. Eric whacked her in the back, and she fell to the floor. She looked up at him like a true slave, and then around at the people. A few people were staring at her naked body laying onthe floor. She crawled through the arch as fast as she could, her heart pounding. Eric let out his usual snicker.

She returned to her safety zone, and slipped her slender legs through the holes in the swimsuit. "Wait a minute..." The swimsuit, come to realize, was many sizes too small! As she snugged it up between her legs, the front came just below her nipples, and the straps not much higher! She strained to pull them up, the crotch section cutting into the soft skin in between her legs, and squeezing in between her pussy lips. Finally, she got them on her shoulders. The chest section pressed firmly against her boobs, and for the most part they were now flat. Her vagina was visibly split, it was a permanent front wedgie. There was no way she could undo it, the suit was too small. On top of that, it hurt her crotch, and she later discovered that the friction made it hurt even worse when she walked. It had not gone between her butt cheeks, but it was still extremely tight. It squeezed her butt in to where her crack was a clear indentation in the fabric. She felt so stupid.

Shyly, she walked out. She was slouching naturally, in an attempt to hide her figure. She handed her master the newspapers, and he stuffed them in his bag. "Stand up straight. Spin around. I want to see how you look." She spun slowly, and Eric checked her out, making adjustments with his hands that didn't really do anything. "Let's Go!" he instructed. They got in the line of the water ride. She could see all the little girls running around in their one pieces, and all the older, hotter teens in their lowcut bikinis. She looked like a joke. On top of that, her pussy was hanging out, and many older men looked at it as she walked by. She saw them do it, too. They finally boarded the raft, and when she sat down, the butt of her swimsuit immediately shot up her ass. "Ughhh." Now it was a thong one piece. Eric noticed this, reached over to her hips, and pulled the sides up higher. This increased her wedgie, and her pain. They went through the ride, and she didn't enjoy it. The only other people in the raft were a bunch of lesbian girls. Eric leaned over and whispered in their ear. Then she scooted over to Sarah, who knew she was helpless, and knew what was about to happen. The girl dropped her slim black bikini bottoms, revealing her shaved, wet pussy. She grabbed Sarah's hair, "Owww" Sarah screamed, and pulled her head into her crotch, burying it between her legs. Sarah could taste the chlorine, and smell the salty brine of her pussy juice. Along with going in her mouth, it went up her nose, and ran down her chin. Her back was being pelted by water from the ride, and her thonged-up ass slapped by Eric repeatedly. She used her tongue, and squirmed it all over the girl's throbbing clit, and penetrated deep inside her very used hole. The girl joined in with Eric, pulling back the thong part of Sarah's bathing suit and letting it snap back, Sarah wincing in pain each time. The other girls laughed and giggled. Before long the ride was almost over. The girl, without another word, Resumed her bottoms and got off. Sarah's face was a mess. She walked off with Eric, soaking wet, the water not dripping from her bathing suit, but from the lips of her vagina that jutted out into spaced, spliced by the soaking wet fabric.

"Alright slave. That was good. Now you have another task before you can change back into your cute newspaper. We are heading to the chairlift station, which is about 5 minutes away. On the way there you must pee while your walking, and shit your suit as well. If you don't complete this you will have to ride the train around the whole park naked, and get anyone in your row to masturbate you as much as they like. Got it."

"Yes master."

The began towards the chairlift, which was the bucket style, two seater. Eric planned to take these to the park exit, where he would finish their fun and take her home. Eric told her to walk in front of him, and she did. Her butt was still split by the bathing suit, and her ass cheeks jiggled in the open air. He took happiness from the people that stared. He was watching her ass, and her slender hips, her gently swaying hair still wet from both water and pussy juice. He was slowly getting a boner. Then he saw some yellow liquid trickle down her leg, and she made a path of yellow on the sidewalk. Somehow nobody noticed, and she let out all of her piss. Eric then walked up to her, and fixed her butt, where it wasn't a thong anymore, but covering her butt. "Forgot." he whispered in her ear. A minute later he saw a small bulge begin to form in the stretched wet fabric. She was now walking strangely, somewhat of a waddle, like a person who really has to poop. She obviously had difficulties shitting while walking, but she certainly ended up doing it. The bulge turned into a lump, the lump into a large, thick, black mass that was visible through the back of the bathing suit. She saw boys her age laugh at her, women scowl at her, men look away from her. She looked like a little girl, walking around with a poopy swimsuit. She was never more embarassed. As they boarded the the chairlift, she sat down, the poop squishing into her butt. "Ugh" she said. Eric then told her to change. "Use the newspaper you had for the pants to wipe that crap up." She slipped off her suit and handed it to him. He treated it like a dirty diaper and threw it out where it got stuck in a tree. "Haha, now everyone who rides this will see your soiled mess..." he joked. She did like he said, and wiped the mess from her butt. She then slipped the bra back on, and the panties. "This is all I get to wear?" she asked.

"Of course. I will give you something else at the exit though, to walk out to the car in."

When they got off she was immediately turned on out of her mind. There was only one layer of paper separating her vagina from the world, and since it was loosely fitted, every once in a while a draft of wind went down the front and ruffled her womanliness. The butt was still exposed, and guys were staring at it from every direction. "I hope I got all the crap off" she thought. Then they walked out of the exit onto the parking lot. She looked at Eric expectantly. "Get down on your hands and knees, you dog. We are gonna attract you some playmates."

"Huh???"

"YOU HEARD WHAT I SAID, BITCH"

She followed his orders, and then she felt a butt plug being rammed into her ass. She looked back, and realized it was no ordinary butt plug. It was a tail! And it went much deeper than most too. Eric then put a collar around her neck with a leash, and began walking her to the car. Luckily for her it wasn't far, but she got many, many looks from people. Their car was besides a few trees, and instead of going to the car Eric led her to them. "Pee again, filthy animal." She did, lifting up her leg to do it. Eric thin ripped all of the newspaper off her body, where she now had nothing but a butt plug. She had a panicked look on her face as he led her into the trees, which only separated two roads. Eric then walked out of them again, leaving her there. He came back with a dog. Sarah couldn't believe it. Where the heck did he get that? He tied the dog to a tree, and tied Sarah to the other. He then took out a jar of peanut butter and a spoon. He turned Sarah over onto her back, and spread her legs facing the dog. Then he loaded her pussy up with peanut butter! He shoved it in there until it was exploding full, at least half the jar, and then stuck a dog biscuit in the middle of it. He then led the dog's nose to it, and the dog immediately began slopping up the peanut butter. "OHHHHHH GODDDDD" Sarah screamed, it felt so good. She was already extremely horny, and the dog's rough tongue sailed around her vagina, and began penetrating it. "uhh...uhhh .uhhhhhh!!!" she moaned and moaned. The dog's long tongue was going to every nook and cranny of her insides, and getting every drop of peanut butter. Eric watched as the dog ate her pussy, and she screamed in pleasure. After the dog was done, Sarah lay there and closed her eyes in triumph. Eric then took the dog's erect penis, and lead it to her vagina. The dog realized it and began banging Sarah! She snapped her eyes open and realized it. She was speechless, but it felt amazingly good. The dog quickly released it's jizz inside her, and she was excited by the fact that she was filled with warm jizz from an animal. She was so helpless! She had just gotten banged by a dog!

Eric took the dog away, came back, and let her walk to the car. She rode home naked, with the seat leaned back, sleeping. She was exhausted. What a day.

Insanity 05-07-2008 03:18 PM

Feedback is appreciated!

chico stik 05-07-2008 03:32 PM

The best story ever. EVER! EVER!

uareapossum 05-07-2008 04:08 PM

this story is amazing please continue. Its just "perfect" I dont really have any advice on making it better sorry XD




+rep

Pikachu 05-07-2008 09:26 PM

Great story please keep it up :D

Swisstony 05-08-2008 02:57 AM

Just finished reading this and its amazing. The writings great and its so creative. Well done.

BettyBoop 05-08-2008 08:10 AM

Amazing story. I love it please continue.

chico stik 05-08-2008 06:45 PM

I can't wait any longer

uareapossum 05-08-2008 06:46 PM

I know im dying to see next part


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