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★ Izzy and Charlie
I decided to write another story, mostly because I was encouraged by Marvin's story writing and I do enjoy writing. The characters, obviously, have the names of me and a friend of mine (CharlyBelles) but at the moment the story is completely fiction, along the way I may add in things that happen in reality but for now I'm unsure.
I think some people liked Charlotte's School Trip enough to read the whole thing through so I figured I may as well write another. http://ploader.net/files/28226f657dd...9f99476869.jpg Chapter One. |
Thumbs up from moi. I love your descriptions and you use 1st person really well. And you've given us an insight to your main character without even specifying all the boring nosh like her name, age, birthday, yadda yadda.
Can't wait to read more :) |
You're an excellent writer, keep going please :)
I never pull punches when I'm reviewing a story, but I can honestly say, this looks like it'll be yet another great story from you Ms. Boopster. |
I love it already...Can't wait to read more!
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Chapter Two
The next morning I woke up way too early, I curled my body the opposite direction from my window under my duvet to shield myself from natural light. I only wanted sleep. I cuddled up amongst my mountains of cute cushions and tried to block out morning. My Mum had an annoying habit of getting up early and opening my cute rosebud curtains, I’d grown out of the pink flowery things a while back but I could never get rid of them, and at least they complimented the rest of my room. I gave up and forced myself to sit up, a few of my many cushions fell onto my luscious cream carpet, my bed was literally like a big puffy marshmallow cloud and I loved it. I rolled over and aimlessly shoved my hand around my bed side table until I felt my mobile phone, I pulled it to my face until my eyes adjusted to the screen. I fumbled through the phone until I managed to get to my text screen. /To: Charlie I did the deed last night, you were right it wasn’t that scary. Oh, and btw, I found that book you lent me last year; I knew I had it about. See you later chump, Izzy x My friend Charlotte was the main reason I did anything spontaneous and a little crazy, but we always had fun. Some may say she was a bad influence on me but I knew she only encouraged me to do stuff I already wanted to do. Charlie and I are like sisters, we just don’t look anything alike. Me, I’m tall-ish, brown skinned and I have jet black hair which is at the moment long and goes down my back to below my shoulder blades with a full fringe that hits my eyelashes. In comparison to me Charlie is shorter, but not short, tanned but freckly and has shoulder length auburn hair which is frequently in a bedhead “style” with a sweeping fringe she’s forever flicking out of her eyes but is too lazy to get it cut. I dropped back face first into my pillow and felt sleep beginning to take me for a second until my quick texting friend caused my phone to buzz scaring me out of my slumber. I threw my duvet off and kicked my duvet and as many cushions as I could to the floor to try and wake myself up for good. Sitting up I checked my phone. /From: Charlie You make it sound like I asked you to rob a bank, jeebus Izzy. And you can return my fucking book now I’ll see you in a bit. Cafe à la boring. 11:30. CHARLIE! I smiled to myself at her casual use of swear words, she didn’t care what people thought. Checking the time on my phone, 10:30 am, I hopped out of bed and went to shower, brush my teeth and fight my hair in a war I would most likely lose. |
What do I say?
I need some kind of auto-message: I love it :D |
You have an excelent writing style, I'm just glad that I found this story early so I can follow it as it emerges :)
I hope you have lots more in store for us! |
Chapter Three.
I nudged the cafe door with my knee as the old thing was known the get stuck, it finally creaked open and the little bell rang alerting, Lisa, the owner that someone had walked in which really wasn’t necessary as the cafe wasn’t exactly large. “Oooh Hi! Isabella dear, would you like an iced bun?” Lisa said in her overly cheery high pitched voice. I smiled and nodded to get out of any potential conversation; I scooped the iced bun off the counter and sat at the booth I knew Charlie would be in. She sat curled up in the corner, her back to the counter. “That Lisa’s a nutter, I swear she’s got decaying bodies upstairs, I can just imagine her hacking away at people because they wouldn’t take an iced bun” She acted out the hacking at me. “She’s just a bit too friendly is all” I peered around the booth chair and saw Lisa painfully grinning ear to ear in my direction; I struggled to smile back before sliding back into my seat. “Sure sure, friendly. So, Little Miss Naked Antics, I have a fun day planned for us.” She grinned. I groaned “I’m a little worried”. “Don’t be, you know I don’t really make plans, spontaneity is the new black” She smirked. “Well, now I’m a lot worried” I slumped in my seat and picked at my iced bun even though I knew I’d never end up regretting anything I did with Charlie. Speaking of Charlie, she grabbed the iced bun I was picking at off my plate and shoved half of it in her mouth. “Come on” She sprayed crumbs while she got up. We left our money on the counter while Lisa was distracted with burnt bacon and struggled to open the old stuck door. Of course when we pulled it the hardest it decided to fling us backwards onto the ground, we jumped up and left before Lisa could try and “cuddle us” or something equally uncomfortable. We walked onto the cobbled pavement, the sun seemed to have come out of hiding while we nommed iced buns. “It could be a scorcher today” Charlie winked at me, probably trying to think how she could turn that into a dirty joke. “Doubt it, the weather never makes a straight decision, it’ll be raining before you know it” I stared at the sky, willing it to stay warm. I took off my denim jacket and stuffed it into my cloth bag; under it I was wearing a cotton white summer dress, knee length and as girly as it gets. Not to mention with a lower cut than in looked in the shop, what’s done is done and I liked it anyway. “Cleavage ahoy” Charlie laughed her unbelievably loud laugh and span round twice before deciding to turn left and walk. I followed her without a thought; she began skipping along the cobbled stones trying not to touch the cracks, making a game out of everything. She wore the cutest lace trim dress, but even on her it was short, every time she skipped I noticed she was flashing her arse. “Charlotte! What is your issue with underwear?” I shouted after her with a fake look of shock across my face. “I’m wearing underwear” She stopped and twirled around toward my lifting her dress up, front and back revealing a red micro g-string with the least amount of material on it as possible. “I would have believed you if you just said” I looked around us frantically, the street was wide and small stores lined each side. Luckily those inside seemed to be more concerned with selling, buying or eating to notice my insane friend. “But that wouldn’t have been as much fun, let’s see yours then” She circled me, making me feel dizzy. “They are orange, boring” I walked on, knowing sooner or later I would show her but I’d rather be somewhere less public. I turned the corner onto a downhill slope which led to a small river. I couldn’t help but speed up while going down the hill and fell into the metal gate that stopped people from taking an unwanted dip in the water. I winded myself a little but turned walking up the path to save the embarrassment of Charlie knowing I’d ran into the gate again. I sat down on a nearby bench and waited for Charlie to get down the hill. |
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I like the way you tease us. Your simplistic description merged with your in-depth stuff works really well. Like the description of Lisa compared to the way in which Charlie flashes. It's just great and I can picture it in my head, which is good. For two reasons xD |
Really excellent work! - Please keep it up :)
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Yay! I'm enjoying this :3
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just put me in another story why don't you?
i'll read this eventually :D |
Chapter Four
Charlie skipped down the path and looked the wrong way before seeing me, spinning and walking over. “Running shan’t help you!” She declared. She thrust her hand in the air and suddenly took on the persona of an evil villain; she twiddled her invisible moustache and smirked at me. I stood up and the bench and lifted my dress little by little to show her my orange boypants. I stuck my tongue out, did a little dance and then laughed. I expected her to laugh right back but she didn’t, I was as her face dropped and noticed she was looking past me altogether. I realised that what was about to happen could only be bad, my dress fell out of my grasp but didn’t want to turn around. I closed my eyes for a moment and wished when I opened them I’d have gone back in time a few minutes. No luck. As I opened my eyes, to my right, between me and the water I could see a figure beginning to walk past me. He stopped between me and Charlotte; looked at me, then at Charlie and then furrowed his brow which made his expression a confused one. He turned again in my direct and said “Hey there Izzy” cool as a cucumber. Miles Hendrix, he went to our school, well, he went to the College but they were on the same ground, you even had to continue with the whole uniform rubbish in the college. He’s one year above us, a college student, and a sexy college student at that. Miles’ confusion turned into a grin, he looked me right in the eyes and winked, I followed him with my eyes as he sauntered around the corner and up the hill. The only noise I managed to make was a broken “ah”. “Shit” I put my head in my hands as I slumped onto the bench. “I’d say he didn’t see anything, but I’m pretty sure he saw everything... At least your knickers are clean” Charlie smiled at me and I could tell she was holding back laughter. I let out a pained laugh. “Trust that to happen to me” I flung my head back and stared at the sky. “Lucky you.” Charlie bit her lip and snickered. Miles’ head suddenly popped out from behind the wall that led up the hill, he leaned against it casually. “I forgot to say, nice pants” He smiled that smile at me again before swiftly turning up the hill. After a my embarrassment was almost diminished I said “Maybe we should just go?” “Yep” Charlie was up in a second. She spun around twice before facing right and walking on. |
*face of pure awe*
This... is amazing. One of the few stories I can truly appreciate and read like it's an actual novel. AMAZING! |
*spins around twice*
my name is not CHARLIE other than that i likey this |
I agree with Charlie, I like this too :D
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Chapter Five.
We ended up having to run, yet again, for the once-an-hour bus that took us into what we called town. It wasn’t very busy but it had the basic teen needs, shopping, a cinema, beach, bowling alley and the like. Fair enough there was a beach close to home but it’s not as big, and definitely not in the town surrounded by shops and people. Not to mention you actually had to look before crossing the road down there, people drove cars! We paid our fares and went directly for the line of seats at the back of the bus. We sat with our backs to each window and swept our feet up onto the chairs taking up the entire row, it wasn’t like it would ever be busy. We began a foot fight, pushing the soles of our feet against the others. Neither of us ever won. Within minutes rain began pounding on the outside of the bus, the clouds were grey and everything looked dark and dull. “Yeah, gonna be a scorcher” I said sarcastically. “Well, we’ll have to brighten up this day, add some colour” She turned on her chair and looked out the window. “How exactly? Magic?” I rolled my eyes. She pulled a face at me and said “Well, the world out there needs some colour, so we’ll have to give it some colour. How about... orange and red? Those are good colours.” She put extra emphasis on the word ‘colour’. It dawned on me instantly what she meant, well, not exactly but I knew it would have something to do with my underwear leaving where it was perfectly comfortable being. She wiggled her eyebrows up and down. “You’re a nutter” I closed my legs instinctively. “Well, looks like reds going first” Charlie looked down the bus. Ted was driving the bus today, he always acted like he was driving on ice, in the pitch black night on the side of a mountain, he hunched over the steering wheel staring intensely at the road. We could have an orgy back here and he wouldn’t notice, but that’s a different story for another time. After she’d successfully checked the open bus, she slipped her hands under her dress and out came her not-enough-fabric-to-be-called-clothing, underwear. She yanked open the stiff bus window and threw them out. “Who’s next?” she announced, she looked up and down the bus before staring directly at me and grinning ear to ear. I looked out of the window and down the bus to find some excuse but there really wasn’t one, and before I could think of one she grabbed my ankles and pulled me down the row of seats. My skirt bunched up on my thighs and almost showed my pants, I knew no one was about but I still reached to pull down my dress as quickly as possible. While I was distracted by that Charlie took the chance and took the top of my undies in her clenched fists and yanked them down my legs and off my feet. I was frozen for a split second then I wriggled away from her and let my dress fall back into place. By the time I turned and looked back up I saw my orange knickers being left behind in the road. Charlotte shuffled next to me and we both kneeled looking out the back of the bus. Suddenly the bus stopped and we simultaneously gripped the top of the seats in front to stop us from toppling into the aisle. Once our heart rates slowed to normal, we gathered the sudden stop was the stop to let someone on, an incredibly rare occurrence. A loud bunch of boys walked onto the bus, laughing about something that probably wasn’t as funny as it seemed, the four of them sat a few rows ahead of us after looking surprised anyone else was on the bus as we did. |
Still reading and enjoying :)
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Quite good Ms. Boopster! I look forward to reading more.
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Love it :D
Though throwing things out of windows into/on to roads is highly dangerous :p Ah sod it. A* :D |
Chapter Six |
Still good quality reading ^^ That last bit sounds quite ... compromising xD
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still very good, I want to read more
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This is quite lighter, I suppose than many others I have read on this site, and I like it.
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Loving your work as always.
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My story is on my memory stick and my stupid laptop has decided that it doesn't recognize my memory stick any more. So I'm trying to fix this.
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Given the time i guess you couldn't get your memory stick to work again... such a shame the rest of the story got lost. I really loved it !
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I really like how every bit of this story stays real and doesn't make sny characters go out of character
WOOT!!! :p :D :) ;) |
Wow I love this! I really hope you\'ll keep going, Betty.
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Chapter Seven
The boys laughed together and whispered rather loudly about bums, presumably ours. I found myself straining to hear what was said strangely enjoying the attention. The bus slowed down shortly after my heart rate had. With Charlie there was never a dull moment and I loved it. The bus came to a complete halt and the boys got off, I wondered where they were heading. I suppose you could get to the town from here but you'd have to walk a lot further, I didn't know of anything else out there through the fields and general greenery worth walking to. "You don't have to stare Iz" Charlie smirked at me. "They're hardly Miles Hendrix" "One stop to go" I blew my fringe up out of my eyes ignoring her comment and making sure I had my bag close by. "Where do you want to go" Charlie asked me, gathering her things too. "You choose, you know I hate decision making" I looked at her expectantly "I don't know, we'll decide as we go along then" she smiled and hopped up just as the bus rounded a huge corner and we could see the town up ahead. After we got off we had to walk a little, instead of walking toward the stores Charlie spun around twice and then took a left. We trailed off the cobbled stone path to a dirt one until we came onto the hot sand of the beach. Walking this way, rather than the commonly used paths led us to a quiet part of the beach that was less used we had claimed it a while back, marking it as our own. The sun was high in the sky and only then did I realise how hot it was, I took off my denim jacket, slipped my bag off my shoulder and took my shoes off piling them together neatly. "Back in a sec" Charlie piped up, she left her things next to mine and scurried across the beach, up around the rocky hill and out of sight. I watched her go until I couldn't bear the sunlight against my eyes. Squinting ahead of me I walked toward a shady part of the beach where I rested out belongings before sitting. I made sure I was sitting on my dress because a sandy bum didn't sound like much fun to me. I closed my eyes and drifted off into a daydream listening to the waves and the breeze rustling about me. About 10 minutes later I heard Charlie running toward me and squealing, just in time to as if she'd been any longer I might have fallen asleep and who knows what she would have done to me. I opened one eye and noticed she was carrying three plain canvas bags which I was interested in straight away. "What have you got?" I sat up, crossing my legs and peering at her. "Maybe it's none of your business. Maybe I'll tell you for a price" "Nothing can be easy with you can it? Not one thing." "Well.." I waited expectantly for her to show me what she had. "I said, for a price" She had the bags behind her and was poised to fight me off, I knew I probably wouldn't have a chance if I actually tried it. "Are you serious?" I asked knowing the answer before the question had even formed in my mind. "Indeed I am" "Then name your price." I gave in, I knew it would probably be something funny in the end. "I suppose now we're at the beach we'll want to keep the sun out and the only way we can be sure that'll happen is another sacrifice to the Gods. They liked the knickers idea but whatever else do we have to offer?" She giggled at me and waggled her eyebrows. "My price is your bra, if you haven't gathered" I looked around the beach and it was as empty as expected, as always. I knew no one could see us but it was instinct to be a little paranoid. My dress was knee length, and I'd managed to keep covered below. The neckline was just above my bra, if no one actually saw me take my bra off they'd be none the wiser so I went for it quickly, like pulling of a plaster. I threw it at Charlie and grinned at her, attempting to seem nonchalant. "Ah, orange. I'm not surprised you matched. You always match" She put my bra down and then undid hers, slipped it out of her dress and onto the sand next to mine. "You never match" I laughed, eyeing her purple bra. "We don't have any buses to throw these out of so what's the plan. Are we going to burn them or bury them or something?" "Throwing them in the sea seems the easiest option here Iz" She got up and pulled me up to follow. At the shore there was a flat pier that literally floated on the water, I'm not sure how it stayed in one place but it did. Other than swaying a fair bit it was stable enough. We walked to the very edge and then threw the bras as far as we could letting out a cheer as we did. "Feels warmer already" Charlie smiled "The Gods must be pleased" "Are you sure? You look rather chilly" I pointed at her pokey nipples" and giggled. "Damn it" She pouted, looking down at her chest which only made me laugh some more. My laughter was cut short when the pier swayed a little after a wave hit it. "Woah" Charlie said, her hands outstretched in case she fell. We both lurched around, struggling to keep our balance and laughing at the other's attempts to stay standing. Laughing made us jig about a little too much and caused even more swaying on our already unstable ground. Charlie stumbled toward me causing me to stumbled backwards; a little too far backwards, right into the water. |
I lost my other chapters, I'd written a few ahead on my memory stick which I seem to have lost as well as it being partially broken. I wrote this one just now with the help of an actual Charlotte person who says hello. I haven't read over it so if it's complete waffle please tell me.
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It follows the spirit of previous chapters and was really nice to read. I'm eager to discover the rest of their adventure. :)
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I like this story, it's really easy to read, well written, fun and light-hearted. So keep it up and fingers crossed you manage to recover your other chapters :)
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Chapter Eight.
As I fell backwards I felt like everything went into slow motion, I saw Charlotte's look of shock, I saw my own outstretched arms grasping nothing but air and then I saw darkness as I plunged into the water. Once I'd gotten over the shock of the fall I pulled my hair away from my face as I gasped for air. Charlotte looked at me for a moment before she burst into a fit of insane laughter, she clutched her stomach and tears streamed down her face. I waited patiently for her to stop but that moment didn't seem like it was going to come any time soon. The water was quite warm at least but I decided it was time to get out. I grabbed onto the edge of the pier getting ready to pull myself upwards completely forgetting how unsteady it was. As I pushed myself up onto the palms of my hands the pier sunk down and before I could let go Charlie toppled off of it almost hitting me as she fell into the water. I squeezed my eyes shut as Charlie hit the water creating quite a splash. She emerged out of the water, her hair stuck to her head and she glared at me. "You know what's funny?" I said "I actually did not do that on purpose". "Oh really?" She said splashing water over me "Yes, really!" I splashed back I pushed myself closer to the shore and further away from Charlie. She swiped at me and I shot backwards but not before she managed catch the front of my dress and tear a little of the neckline which was low enough as it was. "Aw man" I eyed the damage but I couldn't see much in the water. "Sorry. I actually, seriously, really didn't do that on purpose" she looked at me with puppy dog eyes. "I'm pretty sure we're even now anyways" I said as she swam around me. "At least the water's nice right?". We both began swimming towards the beach, splashing each other as we went. We forgot about the lack of swimsuits and the fact we were swimming in our dresses, we were already wet what was the point? I got onto the sand before Charlie did and I only felt the weight of my dress as I came out of the water, the soaked fabric sagged with the weight making my outfit very almost indecent. I picked at the material, looking down to see how bad it was. My dress was white but luckily it wasn't a thin material so you couldn't see through it at all, it was uncomfortably clingy though and the rip at the top was a lot smaller than it looked in the water but it definitely didn't help. I ran my fingers through my hair twisting my ponytail to get the water out. The sun was high in the sky and it was pretty hot, I could only hope it would dry my dress a little so it wouldn't look so skin tight. Once I got to the spot where I'd left our belongings I rummaged around until I found our colourful beach towels, I spread them out next to each other on the sand. I laid back, leaning on my elbows to watch Charlie messing around in the water. When she eventually got bored she casually strolled out of the water and up the sand toward me, even with the distance between us I could see her dress was completely see through. The material had literally because transparent and it was so clingy from the dampness of it it was as if she were wearing nothing at all. She didn't seem to realise either which made it a hell of a lot funnier, I wondered to myself if she'd regret the sacrificing of our underwear now. I'd never actually seen Charlie completely naked, especially not in the bright sunlight in the middle of the beach. I giggled to myself and decided to wait to see if she'd notice herself instead of telling her and ruining my own fun. |
apsolutly love this story :D you have done it again bettyboop :)
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