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urlilslave080
10-23-2009, 09:32 PM
It has been 38 years since world war 3, life as it was known before then ceases to exist right now. After the bombing of the white house on the 5th of december 2009, the world went into a rage, America blamed Afghanistan and fired their missiles straight back to Afghanistan, this was the beginning of The War of the Evolution, going into panic the Allies backed the Americans, and countries from all over the middle east and asia went to help Afghanistan, The war was now out full throttle, no one country was safe and for any country to have a chance they had to side with the Allies, Lead by America, or the New Axis, Lead by Afghanistan. Modern warfare was on the advance, new militaries testing new weapons of mass destruction, would this be the war to end all wars? or would this be the war to end humanity? After the first 3 years every country in the world had joined one side or the or the other, which meant that constant little battles between countries were erupting from all over the world, the most famous was Russia v Germany after WW2 Germany wanted revenge for the falling of berlin and the death of Hitler, seeing this opportunity Germany joined New Axis at the start of WW3, Germany was the first country to use the new age weapons of mass destruction, in 2013 Germany successfully blew Russia up, using a weapon never seen before in the history of mankind, the G12NET or Guerrilla 12 Network Explosive Transmitter, it was a virus sent through the Russian phone lines effecting all computers, which caused all caused all computers to dramatically overheat and create explosions big enough to blow up a house, every computer in Russia blew at exactly the same time at 23:00 monday night, the 23rd of January 2013. Turning Russia into dust. Thousands of Russians took refuge in Fin land, But as europe turned into a battlefront many countries took refuge in the allied countries, most of which were sent down to Australia.

By 2015 Europe was completely taken by the allies, New Axis had taken South America, Canada and Greenland, the only countries the allies had left in that region were mexico and USA, which were on the edge of being taken over, 200 million people stayed and fought, whilst the other 100 million people fled to Europe. By the end of 2015 America and Mexico had been completely taken over by New Axis, the Allies Held Asia, Europe and the islands of the Pacific, Australia, New zealand ect, and New Axis held North America and South America and were starting to advance against Africa to have a clear path back into europe.

In 2017 New Axis had successfully taken all of the southern countries in Africa from Tanzania Down. The Allies had just created the new strongest explosive in the world,it received the nickname Earth Mover, the exact name was never known, it was so strong that the land it was used on was completely blown off the map. Using this new technology they opted to stop New Axis having a path for their marching army, they blew up Portugal, Spain, Morocco, parts of Algeria, Tunisia, Italy, Turkey, Egypt, Israel, Syria, Iraq, Saudi Arabia, Yemen and Oman. These countries were completely gone the Allies had completely separated Africa from Europe

Using this technology had down sides, the caused shifts in the tectonic plates causing earthquakes and tsunami's all over the world, all of the islands in the pacific were completely washed away because of tsunamis, the only bit left of australia was the top of the blue mountain which stood 100 meters out of the pacific sea. After New Axis took over africa and had learned what The Allied had done, scientists went to what was left of Algeria to find out what the bomb was made of, after an exhibition of 4 months they finally had the answer, New Axis wanted revenge so they took the lovely America, using 2391 bombs of Earth Mover they demolished the continents of North America, South America and Greenland. Only 3 continents were left at this stage Africa, Asia and Europe.

The human count had gone from 6 billion to 467 million people, by 2019 New Axis had gotten there full army to europe to have the Last Face Off with the allies. After a war that went for a year and a half the war finally ended leaving the earth with only 3 continents, less the 1 million people and no civilization.

The war had finally ended by 2020, people scattered all over what is now called New Earth, colonies have started to pop up everywhere, we are a colony the name of our town is Town Of Seaside, it was founded by Greg Marthelles Jr, an Australian soldier who fought in the Last Face Off he survived, and after stealing a military hummer that also survived the war he drove down south, he found the old country of Georgia, which is the country directly north of where Turkey used to be.

RING RING RING

"Man That was the longest modern class ever" jack said.


So thats the end of my introduction to my new story, hope you like it the rest will be coming soon, and if your sitting their thinking its lame because there's no BDSM or anything in there you will just have to wait and read the next part.

Comeintotheparlor
10-23-2009, 10:27 PM
very nice start. well done

Logan429
10-23-2009, 11:17 PM
Holy crud. Just... man... Where's the hippies when you need 'em eh?

ZuzannaW
10-24-2009, 04:43 AM
Interesting... no sex story?

urlilslave080
10-24-2009, 04:51 AM
Woah calm down, it will be you just need to wait for the next part, which will be up within the next few hours.

EnigmaNZ
10-24-2009, 06:50 AM
Iran might have been believable as heading the axis, but Afghanistan. They can't lead their own country. If your 18+ I expect better, if 14- well. Carry on with the story, I will have to ignore this first chapter though, sorry.

urlilslave080
10-24-2009, 07:26 AM
Part 2 hope you all enjoy.

Finally school had finished, i walked out of class and looked up into the blue sky. Well i suppose i better get going home, as i walked home i couldn't help but look at the large metal Fences that had been placed around Town of Seaside they were at least 5 meters tall and barbed wire at the top, you couldn't see out or in of them, and they must have been around half a foot thick, there was only one gate which was up the top of the hill looking over the town, the fence even ran through the sea bout 100 meters out 300 meters across then back in. Everyone said the fence was to stop attacks on us and that no one could get through, they had militia on posts every 100 meters, after the war i guess we built our own defence, we had a small army just enough to protect ourselves, in our colony there were around 600 residents there are other colonies around New Earth the closest is around 720 k's away we are currently at peace with them, we often do trading with other colonies but as im only 17 i am not yet of age to leave here for any reason but the good news is ill be 18 in 3 weeks. There are also the freeroamers as we call them, they are normally in a bunch of around 8 they have cars and just free roam every where most of them are savage and raid colonies and old building for food and materials, in New Earth there is no currency like back before the war we only trade material because New Earth believe that money is the root of all evil and they also think it started the war.

i can't stop thinking about my exam coming up as soon as i get home i have to study, at the end of schooling each student sits an exam that determines what job they will do in the future, this is the first year that all of the student will leave the colony and go to a new one, this colony is over crowded so they built a new one and we will be the first to inhabit it and for the next few years they will send more people to come and live in our colony, i really hope i get to become the leader it would be absolutely amazing.

"Mum, Dad, I'm home" I yelled, no answer they must be out, i went upstairs to my room and started to study, the weird thing is through out WW3, alot of things still survived, for example most people still have computers and the internet servers still run although it has been debated between colonies before that due to lack of system maintenance the internet will be gone soon and unless they find someone who knows how to run it we may never get it working again. And until up to a few months ago we could still use mobiles but our signal tower broke so we cannot get reception, but phones connected to phone lines still work
i had been studying for hours, till i heard a knock on the door. I ran down stairs to see who it was, it was a man my father worked with, my mother and father were high up in the government system of town of seaside so they travelled around New Earth a bit
"Hey Jack, message from your father they are going to be away for two weeks and your sister Natalie is at a friend house for the nest few weeks but she will be back to check up on you, though i wouldn't count on it you know how them 21 year olds are always drinking and partying, bloody little kids i swear, anyway that is all" he said and he walked away. this meant that i had the house to myself for the next 2 weeks, i liked having the house to myself i could do what ever i wanted.

so thats the end of this section, i know you may find it boring but it was just to give you a little bit of detail how life is on New Earth

Joke
10-24-2009, 09:48 AM
Dude holy crap!! The first part blew me away, kudos to you, please continue this story.

Caliboy
10-24-2009, 04:54 PM
I love it so far, but the grammar is terrible. Its very hard to read. But the actual idea is very good. Sounds similar to a new society, but i love that story too so i cant complain.

urlilslave080
10-24-2009, 05:03 PM
Yea i know, my grammar is rather shocking, sorry dude ill try to work on it.

Caliboy
10-24-2009, 05:05 PM
Its honestly just using periods when you end a sentence. Thats really all it is.

urlilslave080
10-24-2009, 05:12 PM
thanks for the advice Caliboy, really appreciated.

Galijvik
10-24-2009, 11:48 PM
I really like the history context your had put in, it's very interresting, althourg I dot think it's possible. FOr sex sotry, I understand, I think, in witch direction you are going. I think it's well to take your time to place the environnement before. It's always making the storie better.

urlilslave080
10-25-2009, 12:56 AM
part 3

So i was ready for my exam, i had been studying all week.
"Name, please?" The examiner said.
"Jack Arloom." I replied, she gave me a ticket that read 'Row 6, Table 8' i walked to me seat and sat down.
"Once i have handed out the paper and test you may start, if you have a question raise your hand." The examiner said.

I got my test and started, the test was put into 2 main sections the first was knowledge, the second was scenario based. The scenario based was used to see what position you would acquire, the knowledge was to see how high in the position you would be first placed into. In the two main sections there were also sub sections, the test would have been over 50 pages long well i mean it had to last for 6 hours with 2 30 minute breaks.

I looked up at the clock, 2 hours to go and i had only just finished the knowledge section, now onto scenario.

1. You learn that a near by colony is planning an attack on a colony allied to yours, the only thing you can do to help is fight against the attacking colony, but you know that if you do help your allies that your colony will be destroyed. In a moderate amount of information, what would you do?

In the world of today, every colony must look out for themselves, if helping allied colonies harms your own colony then it is better not to do so, to keep my colony safe i would not go to the aid of my allies and let the other two colonies have their battle.

After another 60 questons i had finished my exam and i walked home again, everyone in the school sits their exams at the same time, all grade levels have exams but ours are the most important, so they cram abut 80 students into one room that normally is used for about 40-50 so it was great to be one of the early ones to get out.

It was a weekend which was good, each colony had different laws, some had very few our colony was rather strict you couldn't drink alcohol or smoke cigarettes until you were 17, some colonies had this stuff called weed, it was apparently like cigarettes but better, i dunno ive never seen it before as it is illegal in Town of Seaside. This weekend we had the After Exam party, it was a party that when the exams were finished someone would through a party and everyone would go, most would drink some wouldn't but they were always great fun, this was the first time i could drink at the After Exam party because my birthday is 4 days after the exam.

urlilslave080
10-25-2009, 01:06 AM
i know it was only short and im sorry if your upset but thats how that chapter has been written, i would like to thank everyone for the comments and feedback, if there something you dont like please tell me and i can try my hardest to fix it.

Caliboy
10-25-2009, 08:16 PM
Grammar was much, much better that time. A few runon sentences near the end, but much better. You have a good story here, and it didnt take me forever to read it. Keep it up.

Odiefrom
10-25-2009, 09:14 PM
This is interesting. I'm glad that the sex and all that haven't come up yet, because you are using this time to build a setting. The grammer that's been pointed out above does seem to be improving, especially from your first post to your last. I like how you seem to be putting these parts out at a smooth pace, too. I'm going to keep on reading this.

urlilslave080
10-26-2009, 12:01 AM
Chapter 4

Time to get my results back. I had been waiting for this all weekend. I walked into class and took my sat at the back.

"Jack Arloom, your results" Miss Henderson said. I walked up to her, grabbed my paper and took my seat again. I slowly opened the seal pulling out the results page.

Knowledge: 91%, Straight A

Area of Work: Government and military

Title: Head of Department of War Tactics and Defence

Training Needed: Yes

Trainer: Tactics specialist Tom Martins

Colony: Town of Seaside being transferred to New Georgia Town

Training Location: 1 month training in Town of Seaside till departure, 11
months in New Georgia Town over internet.

Other Minor Training: Full military training

Licences Needed: Gun Licence
Military Vehicle Licence

Payment: Ownership of fully furnished house
Ownership of Vehicle
Food and drink supply
Energy Supply
Phone line
Allowance - Government will give me anything at their expense

Wow this was all really big news. I was to Become the head of Military Defence and Tactics. I would own a house and a car and would never have to worry about food or anything because i would be supplied with it. Today it was hard to come by a lifestyle like this as i said there was no money so normally you would trade for things. I could not wait to get home and tell Mum and Dad.

One of the weird things about today is most of everything we use comes from Old Earth. Most things were not destroyed in fact down around this area which didn't see much of the war most things are still the same except a lot less people. There are a lot of things that Old Earth used to have which we no longer do, money for example. I have always wondered what it would be like to live on old earth, but no one that was born before the war will talk about it.


Ok this brings us to the end of chapter 4, just so you know this is hopefully going to be a relatively long story, if your getting bored hopefully it will start to interest you soon. Thanks for all the comments and help if you do give me help i will take it in to the best of my ability.

Please keep commenting it feels great when i see someone has posted a comment even if it is to correct me on something.

Odiefrom
10-26-2009, 03:50 AM
Very good post, although it was a little short. It's pretty cool seeing this updated almost every day, keep it up!

Caliboy
10-26-2009, 12:19 PM
Dont worry about the way you are doing it. You are doing a great job setting up this story.

Atelo
10-26-2009, 07:39 PM
I'm so glad you started capitalizing I's in the 4th chapter. :)

urlilslave080
10-28-2009, 03:37 AM
Chapter 5

It was the night of my birthday which meant major party. I was finally 18, I was finally free. Most people from the senior years of my school came. My dad supplied all the alcohol for the night.

"All right son we are going now but remember you have to clean up before we get back, we will be back in a week. Also whatever is broken you will be fixing" My dad yelled from the front door.

My Mum and dad got called out on some government meeting off in another colony. The best thing was that our house was a good 200 m away from everyone else so we didn't have to worry about being to loud. My Best mates Mark and Gaje were here and everyone was set to arrive in half an hour. We thought we would start slightly earlier then everyone else. We cranked the tunes and started drinking having a chat about our plans for the night.

"I am going to root Penelope tonight." Gaje said.
"You got protection?" I threw back at him

He just smiled and pulled three packets of condoms out of his pockets handed one to me and one to Mark. Mark and I laughed simultaneously. We were all planning to lose our virginity tonight and we all had picked the girl of our choice.

DING DONG

People had started to arrive, I opened the door and motioned them out to the back by the table. Within half and hour we had about 40 people there which was all that was coming. We had enough alcohol to last us all night and we planned on going as long as possible. After the first hour and a half everyone had hit the stage where the were lose, we were all just having a great time now, not worrying about anything in the world. Some people were dancing others out the back talking shit, a few decided my pool was the place to be. It did not matter where you were, everyone was having a blast. Gaje had followed Penelope to the pool. Mark was sitting at the table talking to Marisa, the girl he wanted. I was inside dancing with Natalie, the girl I wanted.

I must admit that Old Earth had some great bands, there are no new bands around these days. If there are they just stay to their local colony. After a good 20 minutes of dancing Natalie suggested we hit the pool to cool off, I agreed and followed her. When she got in the gate I couldn't help but to eye her off as she stripped into her bra and undies. I think she noticed and I think she liked it. I removed my shirt and put my condoms underneath it on the floor. She dived in and I stood there admiring her beautiful body. She had shoulder length dirty blonde hair, innocent light blue eyes, she stood at around 5'6 or 5'7. Her boobs were around a C cup and her ass was nice and firm.

"Hey, Are you going to come in or just stay out there like a chicken all night?" She yelled out to me, I gave it a second, smiled then jumped in. I think now I know what B.E.P was talking about when they said "tonight's gunna be a good night" that was one of my favourite songs, I cannot believe it came out almost 50 years ago. We mucked around for a bit, I loved feeling her soft skin when she swept against mine. Was this just innocent fun or would it turn into something? I hoped for the second of the two. After a good half an hour of swim we got out and I grabbed us both towels from the cupboard near the seat of the pool. She took a seat and I grabbed us another drink each.

We sat by the pool and talked about the future. I must admit we were both scared of the unknown future.

"Well at least we have now." I said.

She just giggled. I thought it was now or never so I leaned in and kissed her on her lips, it was only a peck then I pulled back. She looked at me and kissed me back. We kissed for what felt like forever but it only turned out to be 5 minutes.

"Lets go back to the party, we can continue this later." she said

I nodded then watched her as she put her dry clothes over her damp underwear. Then I picked my t-shirt up and put it back on and put the condoms in my pocket which wasn't too wet. As I sat down at the table I noticed the grin mark gave me and gave him a big one back. Gaje and Marisa were quick to join us at the table.

I looked at my watch it was 11:00 o'clock and already someone had passed out. All 6 of us, Natalie, Penelope, Marisa, Mark, Gaje and I were sitting around the table all telling jokes whilst getting more and more drunk.

"Where is your sister?" Mark asked me.

"At her mates." I replied.

My clock had hit 12 o'clock, some of the kids had gone home there must have only been 20 people left. We still had around half of the alcohol we started with.

"This is my song." I yelled.

B.E.P I gotta feeling came on.

It wasn't well known around the colony, actually i think Mark, Gaje and I were the only ones that had heard it. I pulled Natalie to her feet and we started dancing, the others followed. It got to the verse and we all started jumping around and Mark, Gaje and I were singing as loudly as we could while all the girls just jumped around and laughed. The girls quickly got the lyrics and we played the song again this time we all sang. Moving slow to the slow parts and jumping around to the quick parts. Everyone else was also loving the song, people inside were dancing, people in the pool were yelling the parts of the lyrics they had just learned. It was awesome we were all having the best night of our lives so far. After the song we all collapsed back into out chair and laughed the next 5 minutes.

"I think I am ready to pick up where we left off." Natalie whispered into my ear. We both stood up and I followed her inside throwing a wink to my mates as I entered. We got to my room where I put on some soft guitar music that just suited the situation. We slowly started kissing, I was starting to get an erection. She took off my top so I slowly took off hers admiring every piece of skin. I unclipped her bra and softly caressed her boobs in my hands. I took off my pants and twirled her finger around my waist. I took off her skirt and softly pushed my fingers down rubbing the bottom of where here pubic hairs were before she shaved. I took off her underwear exposing her vagina, i stared at her beauty. I removed my boxers, opened up a condom packet and rolled it on my now fully erect penis. I lay on top of her kissing her, rubbing my hands over her beautiful stomach slowly pushing my penis into her vagina. After two minutes in heaven it was over, for both of us it was our first time and we both exploded with ecstasy then we were finished. I took the condom off, tied it up then threw it in the bin. We lay their, side by side naked. I have never felt anything better.

"We better go out, they may start worrying about us." Natalie said.
"Ok." I said, giving off a little laugh

We both got dresses and walked out to the table, everyone else was dancing inside but I noticed that Mark, Penelope, Gaje and Marisa were missing. I grabbed Natalie and I a drink and sat down at the back with her. We sat there talking when Gaje and Marisa walked out then 2 minutes later Mark and Penelope followed. I looked at my clock it was 1:15, another group of people left there would have been 15 or 16 people left including us 6. The others came out to the back and started talking with us and before we knew it the sun was coming up, we had completely drunk and chatted the night away. A few people had passed out, 2 girls were out the back passed out from when they had spewed. Out of the 9 of us left we decided to keep drinking. After a few drinks and more chat it was 8 o'clock and we decided to finally go to bed.


Ok that is the end of that one folks hope you all liked it, hopefully the next one will be up within 24 hours then there may be a few days gap as i am going to Brisbane for a Halloween weekend party.

Caliboy
10-28-2009, 11:35 AM
Awesome chapter. This is turning into an amazing story. I really like the descriptions you used, and the writing format was near flawless.

urlilslave080
10-30-2009, 11:49 PM
The next week was probably the greatest of my weeks. Natalie, Gaje, Penelope, Mark and Marisa stayed at my house the whole week. We partied the week away pretty much.

It was my first day to start training. I met with Tom Martins on the beach to do fitness. We ran up the beach and back a few times, i was fit as i love my sport but nothing compared to Tom. After a few hours of fitness we headed back to the base on top of the hill near the gate into town. I was taken to the nurse to get an examination and some tests done to see if i was healthy.
"I will be in my office, Nurse Madison will bring you back to me when she is done with you." Tom said.
I nodded and walked though the door.

As i walked through the door Madison was on the computer. She stood up and greeted me. Her skirt went down to her mid thighs and her shirt showed over an inch of cleavage she didn't even look as if she were 30. She started taking my measurements, height, weight Ect. Every measurement she took she documented on her computer. I was now a profile in the military.
"Drop Your pants." She said.
I just looked at her. There was no way i was this lucky.
"Hurry up i need to make sure you haven't got any S.T.I's" She said as she grabbed some disposable gloves from her cupboard.

I dropped my pants then my boxers. She pulled a chair over sat down and started stroking my penis. Maybe i was this lucky. As soon as i was fully erect she stopped and started examining my knob for any signs of infections. As i said no way i was this lucky. After a few minutes of her examining my dick and balls and jotting stuff onto a note pad she grabbed a jar from behind her and started stroking my dick again.
"Tell me when you are going to cum, i need to get as much of it in this jar for tests." She said.
I nodded as she kept stroking getting faster and faster.
"I'm gunna Cum" I moaned.
She put the jar in front of my knob and got faster and harder. It all shot out into the jar. She ringed my penis to get as much cum into the jar as possible then shut the lid back onto it. She handed me some tissues to clean up while she wrote my name onto the cap of the jar.

I went to pull my pants up.
"Your not finished yet." she said. She walked over to my and put a little bag around my knob which sealed itself to my knob. She wheeled a table in front of me.
"Just relax Jack this will feel weird at the start but you will get used to it, now bend over and lean on the table." She said. I turned my head but she pushed me onto the table. Something ice cold and about half an inch in diameter entered my asshole. I moaned and groaned. I could feel the lubricant. The pole slid easily into my ass. She pushed a little further and i let the biggest moan out and came again. I thought i was done but then i felt a smaller tube enter my ass and my filled with water. It was the weirdest feeling in my life. She pulled it out and all the water came out with it after.
"Now your done." She said as she pulled the bag off of my penis and wiped my penis down.

She walked me to Tom's office then left again.
"Hope she went easy on ya Jack." he said to me with a smirk.
I just ignored and listened to what he had to say.
"That's all for today, we will meet same time same place tomorrow." He said to me.

Caliboy
11-03-2009, 07:03 PM
Keep it up man, this is a great story.

urlilslave080
11-06-2009, 04:30 AM
Chapter 7.

A month had passed. I had finished my training here and tomorrow the military would escort me to New Georgia. It was going to be a 12 hour drive out to middle of the country. I sat there packing thinking of my parents and my sister I wouldn't be able to see them when ever I wanted now. I was sad to leave the only thing that made me slightly happy was that all of my mates were moving to the same town and as I would have my own house I could let them stay with me.
"Jack, go to bed you have an early rise tomorrow you have to leave here at 3." Mum said peeping her head through the door.
"Ok mum." I replied.
"ill wake you up at 2:30." She said, turning the lights off.

Shit, I thought as I jumped out of bed. Mum forgot to wake me. I ran to my watch sitting on the drawer top. 2:21. The relief hit me like a hammer. I silently walked down stairs. Taking my last bag with me. Most of my stuff had already been taken to New Georgia. In fact I was the last graduate still left in The Town of Seaside. Everyone had been taken in busses last week but I still had training. It was good it meant I had my own private vehicle taking me. I ate me breakfast as I heard mum coming down the stairs.
"Morning." she said following a big yawn.
I just grunted, I was too tired to say anything.

I looked at my watch 2:55. There was a knock at the door. I opened the door letting the darkness in.
"Jack Arloom, My name is Steve I'll be your driver today. Are you ready to leave?" He asked.
I turned and hugged my mum. I turned back to Steve and nodded, picking up my bag. I got into the back of the car and noticed the back seat was down so I could sleep through the trip.

I woke up and looked at my watch. It read 12:00. Steve noticed me sitting up.
"Are you hungry Jack?" He asked.
"Yea, what's for lunch"
He pulled the car over and handed me a tin of Spaghetti and a fork.
"Sorry i haven't got anything better. We should be able to get you a good feast in town. You'll be there in just under 3 hours." He said.
"It's all good." I said.
I watched the scenery as i ate. I have never seen anything so beautiful. There were mountains everywhere. It was all nice and green. I had never expected it would be like this. I thought it would be like a wasteland. My old teacher told me about old beautiful countries that are now classed as wastelands. We drove up through the winding mountains and I could now see for miles. These beautiful images would now stay in my brain forever. I could not believe what I had missed out on my whole life.

After a few hours we came to the other sides of the mountains and in a big gully I could see a small city at least 3 times bigger then The Town of Seaside. It was barricaded by a 5 metre concrete wall that circled around the whole city.
"12 years she has been in the making." Steve stated proudly.
I didn't answer back. I took every detail in. This city was my new life.
We pulled up at the main gate. Steve showed an officer something and he let us through.

After driving for a good 10 minutes we reached a small suburban part of the city. The houses were big two storey houses. They were not cluttered together. In fact they were separated by 20 metres on each side. We pulled up to a nice cream coloured house.
"This is your new house." Steve said as he opened my door.
Once again I was speechless. He handed me a key ring with 1 key on it.
"This is your house key. Everything you need to know is on your table. And that is all for me." He said getting back into his car. I waved him good bye.

That is the end of this chapter. Sorry for taking so long to post it up, I have been extremely busy. Any way hope you al enjoy it. Might post the next section up within a couple of hours if not then maybe tomorrow.

urlilslave080
12-24-2009, 04:37 AM
So i have decided that i should finish this story so over the next week or so ill be finishing this story hopefully. Sorry for taking SOOO long i will try to make it better with these upcoming chapters.

CHAPTER 8

I held my key in my hand staring at the dark wooden front door. This was now mine. I mean i thought it was going to be big but not this big. I took the leap of faith and opened the door, my heart was pumping so fast it could've easily jumped out of my chest. I opened the door and stepped into a fully furnished two storey house. It was amazing. I looked around the bottom storey. Everything was fully set up. I had a kitchen, office, lounge room, bathroom and and eating area which was connected to the kitchen. The kitchen and eating are was one big room with a TV, dvd player and surround sound setup so i could watch TV while eating. On the kitchen bench i noticed an envelope with 3 keys and a letter inside them. I pulled out the letter and started reading.

Dear Mr Jack Arloom.
My name is Mr John Lee, I am mayor of New Georgia. This letter is to welcome you into your new home. You will notice 3 keys. One is to your work car, another is to your personal car, and the last is to your safe in your master bedroom. Everything in the house is now yours you are free to do with it what you wish. For you convenience we have hired a maid who will live with you. We have also hired a gardener, pool cleaner, car cleaner and a cleaner who will clean the outside of your house and your windows for you. These hired men and women will come every Thursday. Your maid should arrive tomorrow. Your maid will have her own car. We will pay your maid and the hired workman for you, but you may tip them. You are free to have other people live with you but you must fill out a form. You can always pop into the mayors office to collect these forms. New Georgia now has a form of currency which you will receive a cash pay every week on the Tuesday. A book of laws will be delivered tomorrow, If you have any questions my number has been saved into your mobile which is in your room on charge.
The mayor.
P.S do not drive you work car outside of work, it could worry people.

Woah so much information at once. I tried my best to make sense of everything i must have read over the letter half a dozen times. Why did we have mobile service here but not at town of seaside. That was weird. I grabbed the keys and went up stairs. There were four bedrooms including my own and the maids room, it had a sign on the door saying maids room, I looked inside it. Nothing to fancy a tv, stereo system and dvd player, A bed, and wardrobes. I went through the wardrobes to find heaps of clothing. I went back into the corridor and looked through the other rooms, the were the same as the maids room minus the clothing. There was also a bathroom up stairs.

I walked into my room at the end of the corridor. It was huge at least twice the size of the other rooms. It had an en-suite. Massive TV, sound system, dvd player, ps3 and xbox 360. There was a balcony from my room which over looked the pool. I picked up my phone and put it into my pocket. I went into my walk in wardrobe which was 3-4 metres long to 2 metres wide and at the end stood a safe which was taller then me. I put the key in and turned i. A message came up on he screen "please set code, place your hand on the hand print to you right, then look directly into the camera above the screen. This will take your finger prints and also set a facial recognition for extreme security. After all the scans and i had entered a code the door opened. I opened the door to reveal two .50 desert eagles, a m16, a 50 cal heat vision sniper rifle, a manual for each of the guns, ammo for each gun, a big stack of money by the looks of it a couple thousands worth, a bullet proof vest and a two-way radio. Wow i wonder if everyone has them or just because im in the military.

I went back downstairs to see my cars. I walked into the garage and saw a military Humvee with a machine gun mounted to the top. "that must be my personal use car" i said to myself, giving a cackle after. On the other side was a metallic black dodge charger R/T. I unlocked it and sat down in the drivers seat. I started her up and listen to the purr. I noticed the garage remote on the seat next to me. Its time to take her for a spin. I pulled out of the garage. The engine screamed as i hooned up the road. I was beginning to like where i was. I new i would fit in real fast

ledzep957
12-24-2009, 10:59 AM
I'm sorry but how old are you? Look I like the idea but the indroduction makes no sence. No offense but take this as constructive critisim. Next time do some research. Germany is very much allied with the US and they would never ever attack someone for anything related to WW2. Germany is to this day humiliated by the events surronding the rise of Adolf Hitler, the Nazi party, holocaust, and anything to do with WW2. Also Afghanistans gov. is aided heavily by the US and they would not just bomb us.

ledzep957
12-24-2009, 11:15 AM
I also forgot to mention Presiden Karzi of Afghanistan came to power by the help of the US. Also Russia would more likely be against the US due to that thing called the Cold War. O and you cant just "blow up" a county. If you build a bomb that big it wouldnt mind borders and a bomb that big would most likely destroy all life on earth.

urlilslave080
12-24-2009, 07:53 PM
Thank you for the criticism, i would like to say in my defence that is only a STORY non of it is true. Also i am 20 years old. Sorry if the story does not please you but i never forced you to read it. This story is based purely on my imagination.

Odiefrom
12-24-2009, 09:29 PM
Wow I thought this story had disappeared for good! Glad to see it is back.
And to ledzep, this is set in the future. Things can change in the course of half a century. Take Germany, for instance. Not even a country yet, it united to a country, then proved to be a formidible threat in half a century, only to turn around and become a very strong ally in another half century. Things change, so this story is plausible(ish).

SWoody
12-26-2009, 06:10 PM
ledzep i know where your coming from it proberly would never happen but its fiction so its doesnt have to be real i mean you wouldnt tell j.k.rowling that theres no such thing as magic how old are you ? well would you?

urlilslave080
12-27-2009, 02:15 AM
CHAPTER 9

She purred as i drove through downtown, i noticed a few people look at me as i cruised through the streets with some music blaring out of the speakers. I spent a couple of hours driving then went back home to call it a night. I continued going through everything, i still couldn't believe everything they had given me. It was 10 PM by the time i went to bed.

I woke the next morning to knocks on the door. It was Natalie.
"Oh my god, what are you doing here? How did you know where i live?" I blurted out. She looked just as shocked as i felt.
"Wow." Is all she said.
"Wow what, i am so glad to see you but still how did you get here?" I Asked
"I was driven here" she replied.
"By who" I snapped back
"I think i am you maid" She said stunned. I looked at her not knowing what to do. I invited her in, she told me some government person wanted to see me outside. I left her in the kitchen then went back outside.

"Hey Jack how are you doing?" He asked.
"A bit shocked to be honest" i replied.
He laughed and handed me a book that read Laws of New Georgia.
"you might be interested in chapter 10 to start of with." He said to me, giving a wicked smile. He got into his car and drove off. I walked back inside to se Natalie sitting at the table, she had already taken her things to her room.
"I will be down in a minute, i just need to go over something." I called out to her as i walked up the stairs.

I sat up in my bed an opened the book to chapter 10.

"LAWS OF SLAVERY"

1. All maids working in a house is redeemed a slave to the house owner.

2. The master/mistress is allowed to do as he/she pleases to the slaves.

3. It is a criminal offence to kill a slave

4. It is a criminal offence to touch someone else's slave without permission

5. Slave trading or the buying and selling of slaves is legal but must be over viewed by authority

6. A slave can only be released from slavery after he/she has turned 40 and has been signed off by their master/mistress.

7. Slaves are always to be collared in public

there was more but I didn't read into them. I sat there thinking about how i was going to tell Natalie that she was now my sex slave. I left the book on my bed ad went downstairs. She was still sitting at the table.
"umm, I have some extremely bad news." I said to her. She just looked at me. I took a seat.
"It's about what you really are here for." I gulped. She still stared at me.
"well according to the law your here to." I was so nervous i couldn't finish the sentence.
"I am here to be your little toy." She said calmly. I gulped again. I couldn't even look her in the eyes.
"They told us all already, i suppose i'm lucky to get with you rather then someone else i don't know." She said.

Well thats it for this part hope you all enjoy.

urlilslave080
12-30-2009, 05:02 AM
CHAPTER 10

I couldn't think what to say to her. It was eating my brain. Should i try something on her. We had sex maybe she wouldn't care. Or maybe i shouldn't do anything. Maybe she wouldn't like me if i forced her into things.
"Uhhhhh." Was all that managed to come out of my mouth.
I went to try again to say something.
Knock Knock. Too bad that didn't come out of my mouth it was better then uhhhh. Natalie got up and answered the door.
"Im looking for Jack Arloom." i heard from the door.
"I will get him for you." Natalie said. I heard her footsteps walk slowly towards me.
"It is for you master." She said, bowing. I stared at her. What the hell was that about. I slowly made me way to the door to see a uniformed military officer.
"Sir we need you at base now, Sir. You are requested to bring your Humvee, Sir, Here is you entrance card, Sir. I will lead you to the base, Sir. I will be waiting in my car, Sir." He said then walked off. Bloody what the fuck was happening now.
"Natalie, i have been called into work, make yourself at home." I yelled to her as i walked to the garage. Why was i here, I hadn't been here one week and i could see i was not liking it already. The girl of my dreams forced to be my slut. This wasn't the way i wanted things. I opened the garage and followed the officer to base. When we arrived at the entrance we were both made to show our I.D cards. As I noticed a couple of dozen Humvees full of armed men parked behind a gate the lead out straight out of the city. The soldier in front of me parked up closest to the base. I saw a park that had my name on it. I parked there and walked into the base, still following the soldier. I was lead to a room that had "BATTLE ROOM" written on the door, fuck this cannot be good.

"Strategy Commander, Jack Arloom. Do you mind if its just commander Jack." A big muscly man at the head of the table, said as he stood to great me.
"No, Sir. I do not mind, Sir." I said back to him.
"Sit" he said pointing to a chair around the middle of the table.

I noticed a map of the city, on the table. On the west 10 units had been places facing the city. One unit represented a squadron of 10, i learnt that from Tom.
"Commander Jack, what does this map mean to you?" The big muscly man asked. I once again quickly scanned the map.
"Sir, i see 100 men on foot heading in from the west, It looks as if they are still a few miles away from the city, Sir" I replied.
He gave a grin, was he pleased with the answer?
"Commander Jack, Lets go." he said.
He lead me back out the corridor, we were followed by a group of 6 men. We walked to my humvee.
"You drive." He said.
I jumped in the driver seat as the big muscly guy took the mounted gun and his men sat in the other seats.
"Out that main gate." The soldier next to me said pointing the gate that lead to out outlands.
Are you kidding me, my second day here and i am going to war.
I was shitting my self. My heart was pumping at a million miles a second.

Thats the end of this one. Next chapter will be up around in around 12 hours. Hope you all enjoy.

daredude365
07-27-2010, 04:52 PM
Its good so far keep going.

MarisaLaugh
07-27-2010, 06:14 PM
Lmao I love the story! I love the beginning ecspecially.(and not only because my name is Marisa and my crush's name is Gage) :)

dalbo94
07-27-2010, 09:20 PM
thats why you make good grades in school O.o

daredude365
08-02-2010, 09:07 PM
thats why you make good grades in school O.o

Yup, thats why kids. lol

Dicedarefan666
08-03-2010, 02:22 AM
Wow I thought this story had disappeared for good! Glad to see it is back.
And to ledzep, this is set in the future. Things can change in the course of half a century. Take Germany, for instance. Not even a country yet, it united to a country, then proved to be a formidible threat in half a century, only to turn around and become a very strong ally in another half century. Things change, so this story is plausible(ish).

Then why is there still an xbox 360 and ps3 in his living room?

I'm sorry, this story seems like it could use some well thought out details. Cool idea though.

Honestman
08-21-2010, 10:20 PM
Well maybe the war used up all the technology and all aspects of new consoles were turned to military application. You never know.

kmacroxs
10-22-2010, 06:48 PM
..... By 2015 Europe was completely taken by the allies, New Axis had taken South America, Canada and Greenland, the only countries the allies had left in that region were mexico and USA........

dude, what the fuck,
how did the New Axis take over Canada, Canada is fuckin' protected by the USA
in order to take over Canada, New Axis would have had to take over USA first

Memories for Life
10-22-2010, 06:55 PM
dude, what the fuck,
how did the New Axis take over Canada, Canada is fuckin' protected by the USA
in order to take over Canada, New Axis would have had to take over USA first

Dude, this story is marked "Fiction"! Just accept that what might have been true in real life (Canada protection) doesn't exist in this universe.

Faust
02-01-2011, 01:46 AM
lol, this story shouldn't be on this site. it's a good story but it has nothing to do with this site, just saying.

soldar15
02-01-2011, 07:20 AM
just read the first post...america lost the war cuz china helped afghanistan...everyone knows china would kick our asses

k lawlz

henryzz
02-01-2011, 10:10 AM
I can't see why he is so worried about Natalie. Surely he can make her do as little or as much as he wants. When they are alone they could just be bf and gf.

urlilslave080
03-12-2011, 12:02 AM
After all this time i have decided to finish this story.

Chapter 11
As I pulled out of the gate the soldier sitting next to me explained the situation.
"We are unsure if the group heading towards us are hostile, sir." He explained "So we will pull up on the hill that sits between us and them." I could see the hill he was talking about, it was about a mile away. "From there we can get better intel on them."

We reached the top off the hill and stopped the cars. I climbed out of the drivers seat and the big muscly man jumped off the turret. He signaled everyone else to stay in the car. I looked behind me and saw another 10 to fifteen cars parked down the bottom of the hill. "Back up." The muscly man explained. He grabbed some binoculars from one of the men in the car and started analysing the group walking towards us. He passed me the binoculars "What do you see commander Jack?" I gazed through the binoculars onto the hundred people walking towards us. The first thing i noticed was that there were women and children amongst the crowd. " I count 10 armed men and atleast half of the group are women and children." I mumbled, shaking at the thought of what could come next. "Refugees, maybe?" He said to me. I looked over to the car and saw the soldiers confused look. The muscly man walk a few metres behind me and signalled the cars at the bottom of the hill to come up. He ushered me into the driver's seat then jumped back onto the turret. "Forward!" He roared. Our squadron of cars flew furiously down the hill and towards the refugees.

We came to a halt infront of the worried group. The men who were armed had their guns aimed at us. I noticed that the guns were old farm guns. A single man stepped foward asking to talk to who was in charge. The muscly man leaped from the turret. "Commander jack, c'mon" I slid out of my seat and began walking towards the man in front. "who are you?" The man in front of the group called out. "I am Head commander Merv." The big muscly guy said. "this is strategy commander Jack." The guy lowered his gun slightly. "I am John, responsible for leading these people to safety." Merv walked over to one of the soldiers in the car and started talking to him. "Commander Jack!" He called me over to him. As i got there they where talking over the radio to the Headquaters. "We are taking these people back, go get my men out of the car. The women, children and the sick will ride back, the rest will jog." I ordered all of the men out of the cars expect the drivers. They started giving the women and children seats first. Once all the women and children had a seat in the car the soldiers began getting the sick men a spot to sit. "Jack your driving." Merv yelled out to me. I jumped into the driver's seat. Merv ran along side his men. We slowly drove back to New Georgia. The men ran beside us. As we arrived the giant steel gates openedand everyone was ordered out of the vehicles. Once everone was out of my humvee i drove it to my park. I slid out and entered the Headquaters.

Thats the end of this chapter
Wow it has been so long since i have written this. I am hoping to finish over the next few weeks. Sorrry if the chapter is too short but i wanted something small to kick it off again.